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Graffiti frames the tunnel's tomb, beneath the city's core where writings stretch upon the wall in dialects profane A hallmark of the day's routine, but often shares the scene where silent fears have set apart the lives that mingle here The masses wait in every shade, each one who shares the grind, And day, by day, the same routine, they wait, but never see the writing on the wall displayed, each life so out of touch Too occupied for reaching out to be the other's friend No glance, no chance to say hello to the stranger by your side A wall has grown to come between the hand of humankind They board as one, but coldness churns through veins beneath the ground Habits honed have deafened ears to echoes all around Distance tumbles through the aisles, small words too frail to say "How are you, what can I do to help you smile today?" No hands to grasp, no questions asked, just eyes in downward glance, A phone in hand, whatever land, beyond all human touch As seasons pass, left in the dust the silence breeds and feeds more apathy, that beats the heart, as cold and hard as stone.. The sound of silence just rumbles on, until the walls come down __________________________________________________ The Wall Contest: Sponsor Anthony Slausen

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Date: 10/31/2016 11:08:00 AM
...The entombment of the individual in a vault of their own making....great take on the theme Carrie
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Date: 10/29/2016 1:03:00 PM
I love where you took the theme, Carrie...human walls...together but so apart...such sadness felt in your words. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 10/29/2016 10:43:00 AM
Congrats Carrie! This is a marvellous piece of work! Life has really become like you have expressed! Balveen
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Date: 10/29/2016 8:54:00 AM
Congrats well-done great write
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Date: 5/18/2016 12:47:00 AM
Very creative to show how no one cares in this world today Congrats on your well deserved win. Hugs, RP
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Date: 5/15/2016 11:56:00 AM
Congrats Carrie... i think you chose the most diffucult combination and what a work of art you have created. This poem is deep in emotion and facts.... congrats once more. :-)
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Date: 5/14/2016 5:26:00 PM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 5/14/2016 10:58:00 AM
C O N G R A T U L A T I O N S !! on your awesome win with this wonderfully penned poem
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Date: 5/2/2016 2:27:00 AM
great write Carrie, a poignant revelant topic of communal disassociation, being apart in a cluster,.. reads easy and flows nice with the little rhymes, and the twisted sentences, adds a feeling of total engagement with the piece,..well done ...Ian
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Date: 5/1/2016 8:31:00 PM
While doing my first degree at the U of Utah, I would commute via the train and a bus to and from campus. I reflected frequently about how detached everyone was from one another. Each with headphones, cell phones, laptops etc. You felt rude for trying to be polite. A simple, How are you? might disrupt whatever important business was happening on their phone etc. We're strange animals, we people. I liked your write, and it's nice to know I am not alone in my feelings. =) -G
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