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Writing a Love Sonnet

If only I could write you a sonnet, Iambic pentameter and what not, Let my muse mull profoundly upon it. I must write it quickly lest I forgot. It will have to stress real passion, love, Mention a rose if I really must But for heaven's sake leave out the white dove, Still do mention the red moon that I trust. Compare her eyes to some fragrant flower, And wish to taste her full strawberry lips, Scheme to meet her in a quiet bower, Clouds enfold us in mythical eclipse. Will she come, will she go, my marigold? Ah, my poor love sonnet has now gone cold.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 1/2/2024 5:40:00 AM
Back with belated congratulations.
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Date: 12/11/2023 10:45:00 AM
Hi, Victor! Seems you caoture the hearts and minds of many here. And suppirt many as well. Good for you, Congrats on a win, as well. Merci Pangie
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Date: 12/2/2023 8:14:00 AM
Lovely ! Really liked ...”scheme to meet her in a quiet bower...clouds enfold us in mythical eclipse..”
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Date: 11/27/2023 5:31:00 PM
It's something different, as well as somewhat humorous. I was captivated.
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Date: 11/27/2023 9:00:00 AM
Back to say I liked this one and thank you for dropping by my POTD with a nice congratulations note. Sara K
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Date: 11/27/2023 7:24:00 AM
I love the time line on this . Quick and playful full of desire … getting the words down before they disappear! Hugs and blessings dear Victor ! Susan :)
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Date: 11/25/2023 4:38:00 PM
I like it Victor, playfully sweet.
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Date: 11/24/2023 3:17:00 PM
Very romantic, Victor. Nice sonnet!
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Date: 11/24/2023 4:56:00 AM
Victor, a clever poem, you always write beautiful romantic poems.
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Date: 11/23/2023 7:36:00 AM
:) Very nicely done, Victor -- love the sonnet form, probably my first introduction to traditional poetry. And yet my favorite, when it comes to sheer beauty and passing. Blessings my friend.
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Date: 11/21/2023 8:33:00 PM
Oh yes the little unexpected twist at the end my dear Victor. Your signature stamp. I loved your Sonnet, The way to a woman's heart is also to make her laugh. Take care. Hugs
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Date: 11/21/2023 2:55:00 PM
For a cold love sonnet is was incredibly filled with warmth! You write beautifully Victor!
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Date: 11/21/2023 1:10:00 PM
Congrats on your win Victor, Very nicely done
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Date: 11/21/2023 10:44:00 AM
Beautiful sonnet, Great winner.
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Date: 11/21/2023 1:10:00 AM
Brilliant! Clever sonnet this is, yes we always read those love sonnets and i can feel the light heartedness of your lines especially that ending. A very unique sonnet this is. Romantic and beautiful. I especially loved the line “ I must write it quickly lest I forgot.“ i think that first stanza so many can resonate with. Pleasure reading your work. Sending you light always
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Date: 11/20/2023 10:44:00 PM
I love this. Kind of a parody of a love sonnet especially leaving the dive out.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/22/2023 9:04:00 AM
I meant the dove
Date: 11/20/2023 6:47:00 PM
Great ideas for writing a sonnet. I have a habit of forgetting what I am going to write unless I do it right then. Hope you are doing well
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Date: 11/20/2023 2:15:00 PM
Love this one.. the ending made me smile.. very clever and great rhymes and flow..
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Date: 11/20/2023 10:22:00 AM
The simplest words are the best. Nice job here Victor. God Bless, JB
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Date: 11/20/2023 10:17:00 AM
And to try to do all of that in just 14 lines. I think this "love sonnet" still has some heat, Victor.
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Date: 11/20/2023 8:14:00 AM
If only we could send our love in simple ways to let them know they are still in our heart/s, sometimes space or distance won't allow it, but I think some how they know. Thanks for sharing this work of love with us and for dropping by my page. Keep on writing. Sara K
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Date: 11/20/2023 8:01:00 AM
Only gone cold because it must end but ah the dove, rose, strawberry lips and marigold are never old for the young at heart!
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Date: 11/20/2023 7:15:00 AM
Not cold dear Victor. I'd set on "Keep Warm". hugs :)
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Date: 11/20/2023 3:54:00 AM
Your sense of humor predominates. Sad, your love sonnet may grow cold if she doesn't come in time to enjoy it.
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Date: 11/20/2023 3:00:00 AM
- Your sonnet is written with both romance and humor, Victor - Lovely poem :) - Have a wonderful new winter week ... we expect snow this week :) - hugs
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