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Would You Love Me If I Wasn'T a Poet

Would you still love me if I never tore you apart Took off your face paint Got under your skin Looked behind those hazel eyes Put you back together again better than before say you didn’t snore Lie true my teeth catching these words falling through my mind Would you still love me if I never thought deep Seen outside the cosmos went back and forth through time put it into rhyme Walked across the face of the sun dug into its core Came back to earth in a coronal mass ejection blacking out cities sowing fields with magnetism Would you still love me without my indignation to question god Why he needed man was there even a plan Tell him human intelligence is driving us mad how I see an abstract shape of eternity From my perspective one where we never die So would you still love me if I wasn’t a poet No, you would tell me I’m a pain! for going with the grain not speaking out, or freaking out Bowing my head, whilst closing my mind pretending I’m blind You love a man not a poet I love you too because unlike this you just don’t crow it

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The Situation

Date: 9/19/2023 6:40:00 PM

Not the best rhyming but the ideals are consuming. I made it through to the end and had something to commend.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/19/2023 7:24:00 PM

Heya TS, this one’s written in free verse, so won’t find many rhymes, perhaps just one or two, thanks for the read and commendation, cheers David

Silent One

Date: 9/13/2023 1:33:00 PM

A personal take on the contest and one that reads very well.. Thanks for writing and congratulations on your placement.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/13/2023 2:37:00 PM

Thank you! it was a pleasure to take part in your contest, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 9/13/2023 4:29:00 AM

Back to congratulate on your podium sharing placement :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/13/2023 5:48:00 AM

Thanks Dilly, congratulations right back at you, cheers David

Curie Stark

Date: 9/10/2023 11:43:00 PM

Beautiful She would definitely love for what you are Poet or not

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/11/2023 5:51:00 AM

Thank you Curie, I appreciate the vote of confidence in my poetry and me, delighted to meet you, cheers David

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/8/2023 2:36:00 PM

To get under her skin,to dig and search deeper until you truly reach her..I'm sure she would love that..The fact that you want to see and know her for who she is.Beautiful poem

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/9/2023 4:36:00 AM

Heya Charmaine, you totally get this one, wanting to see past the superficial/skin deep, I love to go into the out of bounds realm, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 9/7/2023 1:42:00 PM

This is your seminal poem or work to me David Sir That sums up and epitomizes you The how and why David was able to slay Goliath Thinking out loud with carefully processed Thought Congratulations

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/7/2023 2:41:00 PM

Thanks Christopher, I probably could’ve kept going on this one, but think I got my message across without writing a book, Goliath was a big wuss lol, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/4/2023 6:07:00 PM

Love it! No matter what I know she loves you, like we do David, btw, I think it would nice to see more poetry dedicated to wives and lovers. Not much of that is around, time to use ones individuality and break that mold. ;)

I Am Anaya
Date: 9/13/2023 10:18:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! Three dimensional character study and the devoid of superficial cliches and surface observation is readily apparent in you.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/5/2023 6:04:00 AM

Heya Anaya, A poets life is sometimes difficult to separate from their own love life, i’m certainly not a romantic at heart, I usually come at romance from a different perspective, but yes I believe we would still have hit it off, even if I was never a poet, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this one, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 9/4/2023 12:59:00 PM

I'm thinking she might want to think twice about loving you because you get under her skin and you're indignant. lol None of those traits are you though, David. You definitely don't go with the grain and you're never a pain. Good luck in this contest.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/4/2023 1:09:00 PM

Thanks Lin, good to have you back after the holidays, I actually meant all this in the literal sense of seeing what’s under her skin and into her soul, but I know you know that, oh I’m sure I’m a pain for a few around here, because I don’t go with the grain, anyways it’s ok to go against the grain once the splinters are facing in the right direction>Cheers David

Yann Rolland

Date: 9/3/2023 4:54:00 PM

so enlightning poetry, i would have never thought the question this way, you build a strong poem, a great inspiration, thanks a lot

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/4/2023 12:40:00 PM

Thanks Yann, I’m delighted you got some inspiration from this one, I always like to hear when someone bounces off a poem I’ve written, I’ve bounced off many myself, even just one line can throw me into a completely new direction, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/3/2023 10:21:00 AM

A wonderful story/write. "Good Luck" I also did this one. Have a blessed/great ~ day/week..........

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 12:06:00 PM

Thanks Paula, you’re very kind, sorry I missed your one, but of course I will have to check it out now, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/3/2023 8:09:00 AM

I am at a loss for where to start showering praise upon this metaphorical masterpiece. The way you incorporate your views into your writing is simply enchanting. Your ability to create vivid mental images is unparalleled, and the choice of words you use is nothing short of breathtaking. The profoundness in every line adds layers of meaning and complexity to your poem. BOL in the contest

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 12:05:00 PM

Thanks Lasaad, I always appreciate your eloquent critique, although don’t always feel deserving, nevertheless I won’t complain, I could’ve kept going into the quantum realm, but gave it a rest this time, gets pretty weird down there lol, cheers David

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 9/3/2023 7:39:00 AM

lol, smart one David, gl in the contest, :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 11:59:00 AM

Thanks Rose, glad you enjoyed, it was a strange theme to ponder , cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 9/3/2023 6:45:00 AM

Brilliant diction and flow of words here. I love the opening and the ending the most. Especially “ would you love me if i never thought deep seen outside cosmos” such heartfelt emotions expressed in a very creative and impeccable manner. Wish you all the best for the contest

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 12:21:00 PM

At the end of the day we are all peers, and It’s always nice to bounce off each other’s tangents, ;.)

Ink Empress
Date: 9/3/2023 7:17:00 AM

Its good to be unique and original and not follow others, i admire that. Your way with writing is beyond profound and very poetic. Truly a pleasure reading you

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 7:08:00 AM

Thank you IE, I really am just my own person when it comes to writing poems, of course we all have our own styles and see life differently, doesn’t mean we’re any less human or humane, main thing for me is never to force my opinions upon others, I do appreciate your fine critique, and well wishes for contest, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 9/3/2023 4:11:00 AM

Brilliant David, even for your unique rhyme with poet! Amazing imagery that conveys a very dynamic person. Such an exciting read, promoting individuality. Just what any wannabe non conformist poet like myself needs to read :D

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2023 4:28:00 AM

Well from one wannabe non conformist poet to another, (paradox) Promoting individuality to me is what poetry is all about Dilly, even if it means less exposure to the masses and general consensus amongst one’s peers, I always like to feel the heat when digging a hole on the surface of the sun, thanks so much, cheers David