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Workshop Poem Learning By the Living

Learning By The Living. Life's roads we all travel down mistakes we think we've made. Living for the memories that we could never trade. Finding set backs now and then in things not meant to last. Picking ourselves up again then moving slowly past. Finding out the secrets of love that came our way. Taking time from time to time to kneel down and pray. Struggling sometimes to forget the chains that one time bound us. Missing out now and again on little joys that found us. Each day moving forward even if just bit by bit. Somehow reaching deep within and finding we can't quit. It's as if the peace we find it finds us instead. It's a matter of the heart that's too long in our head. Keeping score along the way becoming more and more forgiving. A student for a lifetime it's called learning by the living. Edwin C Hofert #2 Learning By The Living. Life's roads we all travel down, mistakes we think we've made. Living for the memories that we could never trade. Finding set backs now and then in things not meant to last. Picking ourselves up again then moving slowly past. Finding out the secrets of love that came our way. Taking time from now and then to kneel down and pray. Struggling sometimes to forget the chains that one time bound us. Missing out now and again on little joys that found us. Each day moving forward even if just bit by bit. Somehow reaching deep within and finding we can't quit. As if the peace we find is finding us instead. Like a matter of the heart that's too long in our head. Keeping score along the way, becoming more forgiving. A student for a lifetime just learning by the living. #3 Learning By The Living. Life's roads we all travel down, mistakes we think we've made. Living for the memories that we would never trade. Finding set backs now and then in things not meant to last. Picking ourselves up again then moving slowly past. Finding out the reasons for love that came our way. Taking time from now and then to kneel down and pray. Struggling sometimes to forget the chains that one time bound us. Missing out now and again on little joys that found us. Each day moving forward even if just bit by bit. Somehow reaching deep within and finding we can't quit. As if the peace we find is finding us instead. Like the melody of our heart that replays in our head. Keeping score along the way, becoming more forgiving. A student for a lifetime just learning by the living.

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Date: 6/9/2015 11:50:00 PM
Edwin, :) congrats on your workshop poem
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Date: 5/11/2015 9:13:00 PM
I like this :) It reminds me of a poet, his name escapes me, but he was known as the people's poet. Line 11 is priceless. Now, as far as potential changes, we send out ideas, you can ponder, take, keep, toss or its cool to let them spark something else, all yours.... some suggestions: Living for the memories that we WOULD never trade (maybe?) Secrets of love could/might be "reasons for love." "Like the melody of our heart now replays in our head." Glad you're onboard. It's a workout! ;) !
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Cyndi Macmillan
Date: 5/12/2015 11:47:00 AM
Glad the advise worked for you. That being said, always stay true to your intent and try to weed through advice as it comes... :D Question: Did you really mean "Keeping score?" Keeping implies holding ... perhaps something with an image of erasing? Never keeping scores... I'm fumbling here :)
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Edwin Hofert
Date: 5/12/2015 1:15:00 AM
Awesome!!! Thank you! :)
Date: 5/11/2015 2:45:00 PM
line 11 all that time bothers me, something in this direction perhaps, "taking a moment in time" line 14 More time problem, perhaps "the chains that once bound us" Line 21 to many it's? perhaps drop the it's and go "As if the peace we find" line 23 drop the it's go, "A matter of the heart" last line drop the it's I like the message, the form works, the rhyme is right on. Great economy of words, perhaps trim a few redundant words cluttering up the flow or not your choice :o) Nice poem.
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Edwin Hofert
Date: 5/11/2015 4:49:00 PM
Thank you Robert for your suggestions and for your encouragement with the first version. God bless my friend! Ed.

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