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With the Falling of Leaves

With the falling of leaves, so leaves the fall. Aware is the forest, a chill in the air. Temperatures falling; the birds heed the call Harsh times ahead: a winter despair. Gone are the bright days, airy and fair. Squirrels scavenge acorns, storing their haul. Braving the open floor, meeting the dare. With the falling of leaves, so leaves the fall. All growth has stopped or slowed to a crawl. Birds are migrating, they only know where. Shadows come early, thrown long and tall. Aware is the forest, a chill in the air. Exposed and so naked, their branches all bare, Feeling her curse, entrapped in her thrall, Trees know her misery, sadly aware. Temperatures falling; the birds heed the call. Winds that are biting, bitter with gall. Cold are the nights now, much harder to bear. Dead on the forest floor, leaves cast a pall. Harsh times ahead: a winter despair. Stormy high winds whip through on a tear. Indian summer has long gone awol. Descent into winter, indecent and bare. Winter is knocking right down the hall, With the falling of leaves... ---------- First attempt at a Rondeau Redouble, jury out on this one...

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Date: 3/24/2022 3:14:00 AM
Jeff, you have captured winter here "Winds that are biting, bitter with gall. Cold are the nights now, much harder to bear. Dead on the forest floor, leaves cast a pall. Harsh times ahead: a winter despair."
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Date: 3/22/2022 8:53:00 PM
As a juror it a yay from me, and I just love the way you and Milt's battle out the fundamentals of each poetic form, a lot is learned from the both of you with the resulting poems enjoyed ; )
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Indiana Shaw
Date: 3/23/2022 5:48:00 AM
God who is great lover of poetry, rewards those who try . . . ; )
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/22/2022 9:22:00 PM
Thanks, I think I backed into this one. Kind of a neat form, but not sure how often I could produce a readable result!
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/22/2022 9:22:00 PM
And Milt is great at pushing me to try these things. I’ve always been glad after I did.
Date: 3/22/2022 2:54:00 PM
Wow! This is nice. I haven't the foggiest idea what a Rondeau Redouble is supposed to be like, but I sure do like the content and the flow of this. I'll have to check out the requirements. Jeff, this is good writing!
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/23/2022 5:56:00 AM
So I'm an expert now that I've done a second one, lol, but I think for me, writing the first stanza somewhat generally, making that opening half of the first line something that leads, and then constructing all the other stanzas in view of their last line (from the first stanza) helps. Each of 2-5 fleshes out the ideas in 1, then 6 lets you conclude with your original opening point.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/22/2022 7:06:00 PM
All of this is quite beyond me, friend. I might give it a try, but I have a difficult time sustaining a theme through that many stanzas.
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/22/2022 3:29:00 PM
Oops, I think it is the sapphic stanza that has the hendecasyllabic requirement, plus I spent a lot of time there today on The Frog King :-)
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 3/22/2022 2:59:00 PM
The repeats of the triolet/trionet and villanelle come to mind, don't they? I saw it while trying to remember which poem has hendecasyllable lines, which I didn't entirely do here, I don't think. Thanks

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