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Wishes To Atoms

With so many full moons on his calendar His high tide will never surrender He’s a failed star And must live with that scar Neither here nor there, Just floating hot air There, I found all your wishes Caught in his bearlike clutches On their way to a wishing star Condemned to him like Europa Married to him with an inescapable ring of gravity Of colliding rage and heart tearing jealousy He winked his red eye Neither unwanted nor unwelcome Aroused a fury of inferno At the Venus I weather His Giant storm in my sphere To suffocate the vacuum inside my fear Light years from my universe Souls howl like hounds to his moons Those alien worlds that never were, but still exist And wishes fall into a black hole to never exit A place where humanity’s raised to Mars And my ashes return to atoms

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 1/15/2015 11:00:00 PM
Thabang, thank you for the kind reply...PD
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Date: 1/11/2015 9:36:00 PM
THABANG,, congratulations on your well-deserved win, enjoying the elements above. Always :) LINDA
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/12/2015 2:09:00 PM
Hi Linda...you've been ever so present and I appreciate your welcome and congrats and this will spur me on to keep writing...regards, Thabang
Date: 1/7/2015 2:46:00 AM
There are some very clever poems in this contest and your is testimony to that, congratulations Thabang xx
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/7/2015 11:39:00 AM
Hi Mandy...thank you for your comment, feel chuffed...rgds, Thabang
Date: 1/6/2015 6:30:00 PM
This poem is so clever.... I would place it much higher !! Well done, and congratulations to you!
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/6/2015 7:46:00 PM
Hi Carrie...thank you for your comments...it's been great participating in the contest and being part of PoetrySoup in general...rgds, Thabang
Date: 1/6/2015 5:56:00 PM
Wow what majesty & a great ending too! Congrad's on your win, Light & Love
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/6/2015 7:44:00 PM
Hi Debbie...thank you, I'm humbled...rgds, Thabang
Date: 1/6/2015 5:11:00 PM
I adored the imagery in your creative write - many congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/6/2015 5:32:00 PM
Thanks Jan...I loved drawing the Solar Sytem as a kid, especially Jupiter, his red eye...this poem has a lot to do with that period...rgds, Thabang
Date: 1/6/2015 4:44:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your winning work..Way to go..Congrats..Sara
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/6/2015 5:24:00 PM
Hi Thank you...the first time I'm learning of this...thank you for reading, glad you enjoyed it...rgrds, Thabang
Date: 1/6/2015 2:36:00 PM
wow, so finely designed.. a bunch of congrats to you, thabang
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/6/2015 3:31:00 PM
Hi Nette...I wish I could take credit, but I merely commented on the beauty that was already there all along...many thanks, rgds Thabang
Date: 1/4/2015 5:33:00 PM
I truly enjoyed reading this wonderfully penned piece of poetry. :O) Well done. Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia
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Cynthia Jones
Date: 1/6/2015 9:20:00 PM
Hi Thabang. You are most welcome. Same here. :O) Awww. Thank you. :O) *S* Cynthia
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 1/5/2015 5:47:00 PM
Hi Cynthia...thanks for sharing your sunlight with me. I do love the stars and all that connects us...I'm truly touched by your warmth...rgds, Thabang
Date: 12/20/2014 4:24:00 PM
THABANG, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy being part of the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, "WINTER POEMS" in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I look forward in following you and your poetry:) Enjoy the Christmas Holidays! From: your new poet friend@-> LINDA <-@
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 12/21/2014 7:50:00 AM
Hi Linda...compliments of the season to you. And thank you. Poetry Soup is overwhelmingly, overwhelming. The love, kind well whishes, just too much really. I am actually looking for inpiration for a work in progress titled 'Snow in Africa.' I think the 'Winter Poems' will definately assist / inspire me further...rgds, Thabang
Date: 12/11/2014 5:14:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Thabang - I choose your first great and well written poem - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too - Keep the PoetrySoup as a haven - (Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Thabang Ngoma
Date: 12/11/2014 10:26:00 AM
Hi Anne, thank you so much for such a warm welcome. I have been reading a lot of the poetry on your site long before deciding to join or post and I'm inspired by the great writings daily. Peace!

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