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Wilting Sunlight and a Daisy Once White

Tell me, tell me, the little voice hisses – Your deepest secret; your childish delight. Of buried schemes and dreams it whispers. Why do you darken my world and line it in creases; Crushed in the clasp of your blinding city lights? Tell me, tell me, the little voice hisses. When you’re drowning, staggering, it reaches Out – of castles hidden beneath the tapestry of night, Of buried schemes and dreams, it whispers. In a saccharine world layered with lies and kisses, Why are you so mindless to your plight? Tell me, tell me, the little voice hisses. Sure as the sun sets, a daisy must wither; Silently – creeping has the day come for your rite – Of buried schemes and dreams it whispers. In your mind, defying Time, a little boy lingers; Of buried schemes and dreams he whispers. Your heart still remembers our world so bright, So why have you left? The little voice cries.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/15/2015 9:21:00 AM
This is very deep, Zxry:) Congratulations on having your awesome poem featured on the soups Home Page. Hope you had a wonderful Valentines day. ~SKAT LOVE~
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Date: 2/9/2015 2:52:00 PM
Such a heart felt verse- I related to it immediately because I like it so much I'm sending a soup mail. Light & Love
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Date: 2/9/2015 2:56:00 PM
Oh my I can't [if you don't wish to work on it further just call it verse] If you would like it to be a villanelle [a fav form of mine] it must end like this- In your mind, defying Time, a little boy lingers;*/ Your heart still remembers our world so bright, **/ Tell me, tell me, the little voice hisses – * line 1/ Of buried schemes and dreams, it whispers. *line 3/
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/9/2015 2:56:00 PM
BUT the cry at the end is very important so I might rethink the end rhyme? to my fav's!
Date: 2/8/2015 2:30:00 PM
Hi ZXRY - I love, love this poem. I have only just been introduced to the villainous villenelle and have not yet been successful - Here are the things I like - you have evoked a sense of mystery - who is this little voice? A younger, more innocent you, perhaps? You didn't 'push' any of the rhythms or force any of the words. Everything flows - including the repeating lines. Honestly, I don't know how this rates in the wide world of poetry, but I know what I like - THIS. Nice.
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Date: 1/26/2015 12:48:00 PM
- A warm welcome to the P Soup, Zxry :) - Hope it will come many more poems from you in the future - Enjoy reading your first, a very well written poem - // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/25/2015 12:30:00 AM
Zxry, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you have fun in this wonderful community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST in hopes it inspires you in some way. I will enjoy following you and your poetry:) This is a great way to start the New Year. Lucky Us, To Have you. Enjoy 2015, with New Poet Friends! @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 1/24/2015 11:43:00 PM
Zxry, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poet's around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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