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Who Broke Me

I sit looking at my half full glass of rum watching as the clear glass sweats and the droplets leave a trail down the sides Funny I see it half full when my life feels half empty I push it away not wanting to drink the "Kool aid".... No it's not what got me to this point but it does taste of lost hope and forgotten dreams Regardless I feel like I'm not real anymore But then who could I be I don't even have my heart any longer.... Foolishnessly I gave it away to someone I thought I could trust and once again Failed miserably.... I so naively I gave it to you.... the only person who broke me.

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Semih Bilgic

Date: 11/25/2019 11:32:00 PM

very nice

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 11:52:00 PM

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it!;)

John Fleming

Date: 11/25/2019 2:13:00 AM

I was'nt sure if I had read this one before when first glancing at the title...apparently not it would seem -- glad I did read it though! This is you at your very best, Brenda...another gem that is well worthy of a wider audience -- superbly crafted! Most impressed...most impressed indeed. In admiration. :) john

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/25/2019 6:23:00 AM

Well I wasn't sure if you'd like this one! You usually tell me how you enjoy my happier poems but I'm glad you enjoyed it!;) thank you so much John!;) hugs!;)

P.S. Awtry

Date: 11/7/2019 12:03:00 AM

"but it does taste of lost hope and forgotten dreams..." what a phrase!

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/7/2019 6:03:00 AM

Thank you so much P.S.! ;)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 11/6/2019 5:16:00 AM

So sad... I've had my heart broken many times, sometimes worse than others. Blessings to you and this beautiful poem is enchanting. Love, Gina

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/6/2019 9:38:00 PM

Thank you Regina that's true! Appreciate your words!;)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 11/6/2019 2:08:00 AM

"it does taste of lost hope and forgotten dreams" - sadly, this is true of so many who put their trust and faith into a person who is a conniver and a con.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/6/2019 9:37:00 PM

Oh yes you have not lied! To have your trust broken in someone you trusted can be the most painful! Thank you Caren|!;)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 11/5/2019 9:33:00 PM

Nice portrait of broken dreams. Poignantly penned. Peace and Joy, Gershon

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/6/2019 1:28:00 AM

Thank you Gershon so glad you stopped by I appreciate it!;)

Pace Ink-U-Script

Date: 11/5/2019 7:30:00 PM

My first impression is that this broken treasure is awaiting its proper place in life. So one should smile for life isn’t over just yet. My thoughts...INK.

Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/5/2019 8:26:00 PM

Oh I know it was one I had been working on and finished it up! That was a past life and I guess finishing it finalized it!;) I'm cool !;) but thanks for the advise! Thanks G!;)