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Everyone sins....This is an Alliteration mixed with the Tanka form. "Whoremonger crys out to God...An angel is sent her way and cleanses her white as snow.

When widow whore weeps while worshiping, wide windows welcomes whistling wings. Wrongfully... wretched ways washed white with waters wondrous works.

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Silent One

Date: 11/3/2019 3:19:00 PM

Great alliteration...

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 11/3/2019 3:26:00 PM

Thanks Silent One....By the way, I absolutely love your name! INK

Vegter Papyrus

Date: 9/23/2019 3:37:00 PM

I have to time and time again. Life changes, and so does the actions. I try to not repeat the same sins like King David. Strong and crafty peace!!

John Fleming

Date: 8/25/2016 6:01:00 PM

Deep, Pace, very deep - But damn good also! Lots of things going on here in my head, all differing ones every time I read it - Love it! My very best regards, Pace. :) john P.s An obvious seven!

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 8/26/2016 11:49:00 AM

Your words mean so much John...it really does!!!

Funom Makama

Date: 5/16/2016 10:12:00 AM

Salute to your pen and a well done to the mind out of which this sea of wisdom emanated. A definite 7

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 12/26/2014 11:51:00 PM

INK, Congratulations -- This is a great way to end and start the new year, having your poem featured on the soups front page. Hope your Christmas was a merry one! Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Muhammad Safa Thajudeen

Date: 12/22/2014 10:30:00 PM

Wishes for the wisdom work.Regards. -Safa

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 6/10/2014 2:27:00 PM

This is deep, but good. Great work and thanks for the visit to my page.... Lucilla

Shabnam Shirvani

Date: 5/31/2014 7:17:00 PM

wow! "whitewash" hi pace! "welcomes whistling wings." i love that,well done. with whisting words were wide windows.. .thanks,.shabnamshirvani

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 6/2/2014 7:20:00 AM

Thank you for the visit...you made my day!!! :)

Paul Callus

Date: 5/19/2014 5:29:00 PM

Who mentioned alliteration?:))) Great man! you did a great job here; a cleansing write! // paul

Kira Price

Date: 4/29/2014 6:24:00 PM

sounds like a cleanse to me. nice one!

Kira Price
Date: 6/2/2014 7:53:00 PM

I'm back lol

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 6/2/2014 7:18:00 AM

Where are you? I need some inspiration!! :)

Macaiah Gross

Date: 4/25/2014 10:05:00 AM

My tongue was my enemy when reading this! It took me a few times but I read it, understood it, and love it. Really enjoy the feeling I get once read

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 4/25/2014 11:51:00 AM

lol @ "My tongue was my enemy"...I love that. Thanks Macaiah!

Macaiah Gross

Date: 4/25/2014 10:04:00 AM

My tongue was my enemy when reading this! It took me a few times but I read it, understood it, and love it. Really enjoy the feeling I get once read

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 4/18/2014 10:33:00 AM

Nice grace Pace! love it! wide windows....

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 4/18/2014 10:44:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by and leaving a comment. A pleasure it is to see you my friend..Thank you!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/7/2014 11:52:00 PM

Lots of wow W words in this tanka to make it ring out with alliteration and the message too is amazing.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/6/2014 7:57:00 AM

Grace is a wonderful element of a loving God..Sara

Jeremy Street

Date: 4/5/2014 4:50:00 PM

Just A Note: I Failed To Mention That, As Millions Of Priceless Lives Are Starving To Death About This Globe; Others Somehow Feel Justified In Allowing While Defending Such ? Man, But That's Just One Grain Of Sand Amid, Babylon's Woes....Thanks For Stopping By My Poetic Friend...Love, Jeremy

Kim Van Breda

Date: 4/5/2014 8:27:00 AM

Beautiful!! The cleansing of the soul. Love your use of alliteration -- "W" seems the perfect choice for this theme. Xx~Xx

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/5/2014 5:53:00 AM

Awesome work here and thanks for your uplifting visit. Really well crafted I must say! This poem gave me hope this morning. All wrong is forgiven I think, when one repents. Always, Laura

Cherl Dunn

Date: 4/4/2014 7:43:00 PM

Well done and a very interesting write here nicely worded. cheri also thank you for your comment i'm glad you enjoyed my fathers son

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 4/5/2014 4:37:00 AM

Thank you so much! :)

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 4/4/2014 6:55:00 PM

VERY well penned Pace! Faving this!

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 4/4/2014 7:00:00 PM

That truly means a lot coming from one of many poets I admire!!!

Jeremy Street

Date: 4/3/2014 12:49:00 PM

Yes, Worshipping Her Store Front Window On Rodeo Drive Or Perhaps Another Of Bugle Boys High Rises ? Washed Clean With Slime Green Sheens Sparkling Revenues And Oh The Wondours, Within It All....In Mexico Their Killing Children And Freezing Their Organs ? In Africa As Her middle East, Their Just Killing Children ? In America, Their Much More Covert As Subtle In How They Proceed, To Strip Their Seeds....Love, Jeremy

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/27/2014 3:14:00 PM

oh my, a double form packed with superb imagery--- awesome alliteration and tanka, pace... you wow!.. huggs

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 4/5/2014 4:41:00 AM

Thank you for your continued support Nette...I really appreciate it. Hugs!

Robert Pettit

Date: 3/27/2014 2:59:00 PM

This is an amazing feat you present. I have never seen a tanka with all the words beginning with the same letter. How you made the whole write make sense is incredible.

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 4/5/2014 4:41:00 AM

Thanks a lot for stopping by. .I really appreciate it your comment! !!

Joe Maverick

Date: 3/27/2014 2:11:00 PM

A very good write as I see it Pace, hope it does well for you, I think the W's angle is quite cool, thank you for the visit to my page..'

Pace Ink-U-Script
Date: 3/27/2014 2:26:00 PM

Thanks for the visit...I feel like its a creative tanka/ alliteration piece. Whoremonger is simply tired and wants to turn from his/her wretched ways. While worshiping "God" an angel comes in and washes his/her slate white as snow. Forgiven! Again thanks for the visit