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Whale

In oceans deep, the white whale sings He seeks a mate to ease his pain His song, it plays on our heart strings As Moby Dick searches in vain Such loneliness no whale can feign For he’s the last of “great white” kings Angry, no love can he attain Casting hapless ships ‘neath waves’ rings January 21, 2020 For Charlie Messina’s “Oh-No A Twisted Char-Lay Poetry Contest”

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John Watt

Date: 2/16/2020 6:58:00 PM

So clever how you formulated the thoughts of the majestic white whale and formed them in the small space given. Excellent write, Carolyn and congrats ~ John

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/16/2020 4:50:00 PM

Yes! It's definitely time to put that whale's energy to constructive (not destructive) use! Congrats, Connie! :) Gershon

Sandra Haight

Date: 2/16/2020 4:13:00 PM

A lot of emotion expressed in your well-written Lay Poem, Carolyn. We often forget that species other than humans experience loneliness too. Congrats on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Charles Messina

Date: 2/16/2020 1:39:00 PM

A wonderful poem, Carolyn. Kind of sad in a way. Magnificent write...Congratulations on your win! Hugs Charlie x

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/6/2020 1:25:00 PM

This is as deep and compelling as the sea itself - should do well in the contest!

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/6/2020 1:34:00 PM

After reading "Frankenstein," I realized that all creatures need love. Thanks for reading, Michelle. I'll check your page.

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 1/31/2020 4:40:00 PM

Hello Carolyn … such a vast area to search for too few females of his kind. The loneliness felt in your verse is touching Carolyn - Lindsay

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 1/29/2020 11:57:00 AM

So captivating Carolyn, I love the 'sea-scent' and cries of white-love midst every word. Best of luck in the contest;-)

Mark Peterson

Date: 1/28/2020 7:12:00 PM

Such a haunting, yearning verse that would cast even the most cynical soul beneath the waves to offer comfort to a lonely giant.

Howard Kerr

Date: 1/28/2020 10:12:00 AM

This an evocative work. I was struck by its maritime imagery and deep emotions. Howard

Silviu Craciunas

Date: 1/28/2020 1:04:00 AM

I am glad for your rich and substance-filled activity. We are waiting for you in the pages of Poesis magazine.

Muddasar Javad

Date: 1/27/2020 11:17:00 PM

Absolutely brilliant!Clever work

Mubarika Sami

Date: 1/27/2020 5:55:00 PM

Very evocative and beautiful rhythm. Well done Carolyn

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/25/2020 5:58:00 AM

Carolyn a magnificent write - i enjoy the intensity in your poems - good luck in the contest. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/23/2020 8:21:00 PM

The last of the great white whales, wonderful write Carolyn, gl in the contest

Panagiota Romios

Date: 1/23/2020 2:56:00 PM

A wonderful write, Carolyn Best wishes Panagiota Romios xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/22/2020 8:02:00 PM

Now that's a whale of a poem for the contest, Carolyn! (Couldn't resist). Superb entry, really. Best always, Gershon

Jack Horne

Date: 1/22/2020 2:12:00 PM

love this - excellent entry for the contest xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/22/2020 9:53:00 AM

Our heart goes out to this 'male' in search of a mate, Carolyn. Loneliness can effect anybody, even those wealthy or in power. gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Quoth Theraven

Date: 1/21/2020 11:11:00 PM

Carolyn, I always loved the story of that whale & Captain Ahab. -Richard

Charlie Smith

Date: 1/21/2020 4:41:00 PM

Wonderful work with this form Carolyn, best wishes in the contest...

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 1/21/2020 4:38:00 PM

Great piece Carolyn, great imagery and great expression. Have a great day,Gordon

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/21/2020 3:54:00 PM

Your poem gives voice and emotions to the white whale--nicely done, Carolyn. These rhymes are not easy--especially with the syllable count. All the best.

Chris Green

Date: 1/21/2020 3:33:00 PM

This was wonderful Carolyn. You did really good with this form and the poem is incredible. Best wishes in the contest

Rico Leffanta

Date: 1/21/2020 3:29:00 PM

Last century, sonic booms made us tremble, but now marine life are terrorised as "Disturbing the Peace" becomes a military mission. Hawai'i was a winter haven for humpback whales, but USN sonar "tests" combined with the floating garbage, plastic waste, and discarded fishing nets have transformed whale songs into swan songs! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 2/2/2020 2:01:00 PM

Oh, Rico, that's horrible! As we destroy our world, we destroy mankind's future. Will look for your limericks. Hugs, Carolyn

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/21/2020 2:30:00 PM

Beautiful creatures Carolyn, would love to go whale watching. Good luck. Tom