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White Curtains

White Curtains The room is nothing special. A double bed with a cream duvet against a bland eggshell wall. A picture of a sailboat on the ocean that looks like it might have been painted by a child. Somehow the proportions aren’t quite right, but the pastel colours are pretty. It’s late so they slip under the duvet. She says “It’s hot, could you open the door a crack?” He gets up from the bed and pulls the white curtains back so he can slide open the door. As he closes the white curtains he thinks ”It’s pretty how the light breeze blows them.” It reminds him of how the afternoon breeze blew her veil and long blonde hair. As he slips into bed his new bride is fast asleep. He kisses her softly on the lips and a few moments later he joins her in slumber. “Whisper my darling Breathe lovely into my life” Passionate ripples lips caress his neck feeling pulse at her center mutual release sun streams through curtains naked in each others arms their morning delight My first Haibun

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Date: 10/17/2023 7:10:00 PM
I bet they had lovely dreams about a beautiful white doves. What a peaceful romantic poem, I am glad to have found. I shall share it with my husband of 20 years.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2023 10:28:00 PM
What a nice response. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Date: 9/28/2023 2:13:00 PM
WOW! For a first, you sure did well, Rick. I like the setting, the softly blowing curtain, the helping the one you love by open the door for a fresh breeze. Joining her in bed with a kiss. The mention of newlyweds, then the consummation of their vows. A new day and the joy of newlyweds. The prose and the poetry melded together seamlessly. A FAV for this first one, my friend. I hope it gets attention and a POTD award. Bill
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/28/2023 3:17:00 PM
You are kind m friend. I appreciate your visit.
Date: 9/28/2023 9:40:00 AM
Breathe lovely into my life. How beautiful is that line. I love how descriptive this write is and how it flows so seamlessly. And the imagery is stunning, creating a pleasant and passionate ambience. Pastel color is pretty, i think so too. Brilliant haibun.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/28/2023 1:35:00 PM
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Date: 9/28/2023 12:40:00 AM
those last three stanzas (save a couple uv punctual deferments) that's what i'm talk'n 'bout..spill'n on slip with little drips; get'n your reader to dream your dream without the composition!...that's all ya had to say dear poet...get rid uv the prose vide supra...change the form to "free verse" ;) i git it though Richard, it's a Haibun...i wrote something similar recently, yet i called it "free verse".."james' feminine" i wuz happy to see you here sir..have an awesome Autumn...much love, james
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/28/2023 1:39:00 PM
I hope all is well with you.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/28/2023 1:37:00 PM
Thanks for commenting.
Date: 9/27/2023 12:52:00 PM
This is so elegant and romantic. I enjoyed reading your "White Curtains" today. Enjoy your day my friend :-)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/27/2023 3:46:00 PM
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Date: 9/27/2023 9:54:00 AM
You have created a very romantic scene. The room though not quite cozy is fit for a bridal chamber with a double bed and windows shielded by white curtains. As their lips caress, the prelude to their love life begins. Beautiful Haibun dear friend.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/27/2023 12:07:00 PM
Much appreciated. I appreciate your visit.
Date: 9/27/2023 8:09:00 AM
wonderful Haibun, Richard. It was a joy to read. I love the white, billowing curtains...the perfect stage you set. Keep up the good work, enjoy your day, Sara
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/27/2023 9:23:00 AM
Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
Date: 9/27/2023 7:44:00 AM
Richard, your first haibun is absolutely delightful. It paints a vivid picture of romance and warmth, immersing the reader in a world filled with billowing curtains, radiant sunlight, and the comforting embrace of a tender hug.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/27/2023 9:24:00 AM
I’m pleased you like my Haibun. It was fun giving it a go.
Date: 9/26/2023 8:33:00 AM
Hey, join the haibun club! Nice first entry Rick. And a lovely romantic write to boot. The gals will like this one. Soupmail
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/26/2023 10:37:00 AM
Thanks I appreciate the visit and soup mail.

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