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Whispers

The golden moon looked over the moody sea as twilight enveloped the distant trees while gentle waves caress the sandy shores and lovers whisper softly in the cool sea breeze

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 4/7/2012 7:23:00 PM
A good start! You could use the word lea at the end of line 3 lee [Nautical on, at, or towards the side or part away from the wind on a lee shore] keep going! 2 more and a couplet and you have a sonnet! Light & Love
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Joseph May
Date: 4/8/2012 8:48:00 AM
thank you Debbie, I will consider your idea
Date: 4/7/2012 5:51:00 AM
Enjoyed this early morning write from you May..Thanks for stopping by and sharing your comments!!
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