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While Judging My Own Poem

Can an earthquake judge its own tears of fury and frustration Can a sunlight assess the black stains on a rose, its creation I don't know precisely but as my eyes move up and down my poem I myself am almost lost into a prose where no river is flowing I started with the metaphor of the letter alpha With the intention of crisscrossing to omega In between your hands and feet got entangled in the bush on the hills So much so that I now find the poem going haywire Why so happened, I feel it's better not to  inquire further Even so, a few connoisseurs happened to taste the flavor Feebly radiating from the apples most of which looked stale The cracked crimson, yellow and green were growing pale Still the few likes made me bold enough to keep out of the rain and hail that had broken out while I read the 'also ran' poem with no distinct course leading to the desired omega I read it once again alert to the erratic enjambment Rated it 'honorable mention' No, the apples have started gathering fungus I deleted honorable mention Dated 25 March 2019

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Date: 3/29/2019 4:48:00 PM
LOL Probir. Believe me, far from fungus are your wonderful apples.
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/30/2019 12:38:00 AM
Hahaha ... You don't see the fungus because you see beauty in words ( or in their generator!) ... Thank you, my dear friend ...
Date: 3/29/2019 12:35:00 PM
None need to be judged the world stands on its own imagery. Your work more than honorable mention. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 3/26/2019 1:27:00 PM
- Not easy to judge your own poems, but you always write great poems Probir :) - Welcome back, you were missed :) - hugs //Anne-Lise :)
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/29/2019 5:23:00 AM
Thank you, Sunshine ... You always encourage ...
Date: 3/25/2019 5:36:00 PM
I have many H.M. LIke your outlook on things. BG
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Date: 3/26/2019 8:57:00 AM
Thank you so much ...
Date: 3/25/2019 4:38:00 PM
i like the tone and play of words, probir... this gets a hugh placement if i were the judge!...huggs
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Date: 3/26/2019 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, nette ...
Date: 3/25/2019 1:32:00 AM
impressive and self-discovery writings // like it, love it /// America was America before discovering By Colombus, I am always I'm before discovering myself; Oh! Yes; I cannot measure up myself if you discover me truly then I can realize the truth of Myself Being..!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 3/25/2019 1:42:00 AM
Thank you so much ....

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