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It was there, just by chance, we were caught unprepared Staring, surprised, into eyes of the past I'd been watching the ducks as they circled the pond It seems that the hands on a clock sweeping time had circled around and like the ducks, without end Today, on this bench, lost men will linger, while waiting for nothing, and no place to go Once we had claimed this 'our' place to hold hands, planning a future that never began Children we were with the world at command I'm glad we aren't talking in circles, .. like then Other children are playing in the rust afternoon, zippered up tight, against winter wind Talking of children..you tell me there's two You show me a photo,…then, I share a few I am all out of bread, as the sun starts to fade taking away all the stains of the day East of the bandstand shadows grow long, falling in corners like memories do We've learned to know twilight can be bittersweet And taste what dim recall has only allowed Goodbyes are said, and you then, kiss my cheek, .. then you turn and you wave, as you are crossing the street Left wondering now, where those lost men will go, it worries my brow, what lost men will eat A shadow of you, is still left in the park, … of us holding hands, as it starts to get dark I leave a few dollars here, on our bench Checking my watch,… I will leave no regrets ________________________________________________________________ When Love Reckons For A Second Time Contest Sponsor Nayda Ivette Negron

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Date: 9/1/2016 2:39:00 PM
congrats well written x
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Date: 8/31/2016 4:01:00 PM
Heartfelt and bittersweet, Carrie. Congratulations on your 2nd Place win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 8/31/2016 2:11:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie on the placement of the contest.
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Date: 5/2/2016 2:06:00 PM
Outstanding description of lost love. Seems there's always a park involved somewhere. Cngrats on the selection. daver
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Date: 5/2/2016 11:21:00 AM
This is featured on the page today, and as you have probably already heard from others, this is beautifully written. My favorite line is "falling in corners like memories do." Clever, vivid, and a little enigmatic. I think I'm adding this to my faves. =) -G
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Carrie Richards
Date: 5/2/2016 11:38:00 AM
Thank you very much 'Graham' for taking interest in my poetry, I have a tendency to let my imagination wander to places like snips from a movie I've seen. I do appreciate your comments! :)
Date: 2/21/2016 9:59:00 PM
Congrats on ur awesome win Carrie..
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Date: 2/21/2016 9:39:00 AM
wow, what an amazing way to provide a backdrop of the park for this nostalgic write, Carrie. This is great writing as I would expect. Love the title too. Congrats for the win.
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Date: 2/20/2016 9:33:00 PM
Carrie, Congratulations on your awesome win. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 2/20/2016 6:08:00 PM
One of my favorites, dear Carrie. Many congrats. Elaine
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Date: 2/16/2016 3:06:00 PM
Reads like a winner..I get the feeling that there was a romantic love for someone who must have gotten caught up in maybe something that they could not handle..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 2/15/2016 8:08:00 PM
Back with my comment which a glitch nearly denied you of, Carrie. There's something to be said about the depth of realizations hidden in unspoken lines. Sensitivity and compassion are easily written about, but hard to act upon. Your poetry is consistent with what's in your heart. There's hope for humanity...7 and FAV. hugs!
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Carrie Richards
Date: 2/15/2016 8:12:00 PM
Thank you again, Kim.....for coming back and making me smile !! I'm so grateful....and I'm still scratching my head what happened to your earlier comment. But Thank you very much !! xoxo

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