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Where the Woods Open

There's a path I always take down to the river where the woods are dressed down open The light of the sky doesn't shine in your eyes but leads the way to redemption   I like to stand there for a moment on the shortcut created by troubled feet woven with wilderness bliss and cigarettes butts It's a path that never sleeps   I see the same semi-blind vision of the river every time I hear baby boat horns blaring in the distance and floating out of view I walk to the rhythm of the trees the faint sound of Wild Thing playing in the car I carry a bent black rod with a tangled neon line and a mud-covered box of rusty hooks and flaming red bobbers I wear my T-Shirt that says Iron City Beer that's cut off at the belly or sometimes my other one that says Just Do It with shredded denim shorts that ride my buttocks   After a few seconds of inhaling and exhaling an indecision I do what most fishermen do with only my thoughts to keep me company I find a clean rock and cast with desperation The woods close

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Date: 2/12/2020 5:47:00 PM
I really love this poem. It's going to my favorites list!
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Date: 2/7/2020 2:40:00 PM
Beautiful, Victoria! You took me along with you down the path, to the wood (where the light of the sky doesn't shine in your eyes but leads the way to redemption!!) and river. Casting rusty hooks with desperation makes me think of a person still trying to resolve old problems/doubts. ~ Regards // paul
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Victoria Hunter
Date: 2/9/2020 1:13:00 PM
Wow! You even opened my eyes to my own poem, in a new way. I would love to hear you feedback on some of my work in progress. I will check out some of your work to. Thank you for the feedback, and reading my work!
Date: 1/26/2020 6:19:00 AM
Brilliant writing at its best. But you know that. I was transported out of my room into your story, walking with you down to that clean rock with you, watching you as you cast with desperation. A rather ominous feeling stays with me, what were you leaving behind to seek redemption? The hook, for me, is wanting to learn about the story that precedes this one....your Youtube video on "The Darkside of The Writing World" is informative. I must watch your others. You are a writer to follow. Leanne
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Victoria Hunter
Date: 1/26/2020 12:05:00 PM
Thank you very much! It means a lot to me to hear that my work is moving people. Based on your comment, I really think you would like my video on my YouTube that teaches Hemingway's Iceberg method. Every week I upload videos on channel, about writing. I uploaded one today teaching how to create your writing voice ??. I will check out your work to ??
Date: 1/24/2020 12:45:00 AM
This poetry is magnificent..! thanks for sharing.. :) well Could I request you to visit my website & read my poem? thank you..
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Victoria Hunter
Date: 1/24/2020 6:27:00 AM
Thank you very much! I have a Youtube channel that teaches writing:0). I would love to read your poem, and give feedback. You are welcomed to give feedback on any poems I post. Thank you again, you motivate me to write more. I would love your feedback on a certain piece, I have been writing.
Date: 1/23/2020 1:03:00 AM
beautiful writing; well imaginative
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Victoria Hunter
Date: 1/24/2020 6:29:00 AM
thank you very much!
Date: 1/19/2020 8:56:00 AM
Loved the imagery in your verse Victoria, welcome to poetry soup. Tom
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Victoria Hunter
Date: 1/26/2020 4:59:00 PM
Thanks Tom. I took a while to post, since I am so backed up with mastering some work:0)

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