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When I Am Not

Don't grieve for me for you see The me I am is you The me I was is no more I'm thoroughly gone it's true No cold no hot no hunger no thirst Not stressed not blessed not even cursed Not here not there not anywhere Just one with the universe So smile I was but now I'm not But when I was I was And when I was I was with you And that is quite a lot 27 December 2015 For the contest, Any Poem, sponsor, Broken Wings

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Lisa Brannon

Date: 3/5/2016 10:46:00 AM

I really enjoyed this poem...reminds is to hold right to what we have and who we love because all too soon it's gone away

Howard Tunick
Date: 3/5/2016 2:35:00 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed it Lisa. You are quite right. Count your blessing and live in the moment.

Lisa Brannon
Date: 3/5/2016 10:47:00 AM

Reminds us to hold tight is what it's supposed to say...darn auto correct

Howard Tunick

Date: 1/13/2016 8:47:00 PM

Thank you again Daniel. Words are really fun.

Daniel Turner

Date: 1/13/2016 12:04:00 PM

Ah, transformation! Great write Howard.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 1/11/2016 5:03:00 PM

This is great! A few commas might make is read a little easier....Its very good anyway. BG

Howard Tunick
Date: 1/12/2016 9:14:00 PM

Thanks Barbara. The three lines starting "No cold... Not stressed... Not here...." I read each of those lines very fast as if each of the word/conditions expressed in each line was one. Followed by "Just one with the universe" read slowly. I thought commas would cause a pause between each "condition" changing the rhythm I was trying for. I would appreciate feed back on that. I am very new at this. All constructive criticism is greatly appreciated. So most sincerely thank you. H

Pete Yuhas

Date: 1/10/2016 7:45:00 PM

Way to go Howard, very nice write.

Howard Tunick
Date: 1/10/2016 7:59:00 PM

Thank you so much Pete. Thank you for the read.

Legendary Legend

Date: 1/10/2016 8:33:00 AM

awesome poem

Howard Tunick
Date: 1/10/2016 5:02:00 PM

A most hearty and sincere thank you Legendar. Your appreciation is appreciated.