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This poem was inspired by a painting/picture shown by one of the poets on soup and the contest itself.

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my curiosity coaxes me into sneaking in to this cubbyhole built under an old robust tree a rumor I heard, there’s a clandestine so, I peep through its small and dusty window pane I widely open my eyes as I could while I’m surreptitiously gazing inside this empty room the only thing I see is a barricade of wood Oh, I think, playing hide and sick in there is still good as I go around to find if there’s a small door to my dismay, it’s locked with a rusty knob then, I find another small window on the other wall on big branch of the tree, I clamber to view the whole watching all over again the void inside shadows begin to appear behind the wooden bar as they accrue, my braided hair rise up on both sides for a high jump, I prepare my legs while thinking where to hide their ears likely found on top of their nose in shape of cone so creepy things they are, I’m so scared but I must know are they giants or dwarfs who’ll give me their magic stones or a black lady to transform to white and lurks me with her bones while my whole body is reverberated with numbness I hold on to the small branch of a tree with a glued grip suddenly, a mother cat with her five lovely kittens coming out buffing their fur softly with tenderness March 31, 2013
Note to the contest sponsor: My dear friend Seren, I’ve seen your blog before but I’m so sorry if I was not able to leave a comment because of time constraint. However, I vividly remember the picture because it was truly beautiful. I’m pretty sure it was one of your awesome paintings. You’re a very talented artist/painter and I was inspired to write a poem today for that beautiful paintings of yours. Thank you so much for sharing! Fourth Place Contest: What Lurks Within Judged: 4/7/2013 Sponsor: Poet Seren Roberts

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Date: 4/13/2013 10:53:00 AM
Leonora; This is beautiful. You have painted a beautiful picture here for us to see. You have great imagination. Thanks for sharing and good lick in the contest..... Lucilla
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Date: 4/8/2013 9:02:00 AM
hello my dear friend Leonora, this is another great piece from you. a sweet twist at the end..so like it. Congratulations on your win...two thumbs up!!!! mwauh!!! God bless you always...
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Date: 4/8/2013 8:24:00 AM
Hi there sweetie many congrats on your winning place love, a super write. Look after yourself girl and have a brilliant week xx
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Date: 4/8/2013 2:31:00 AM
hi my sweetest sista Leonora :) congratulation for your winning <3 enjoyed much your beautiful penned <3 :) luv and hugs <3 Sk.
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Date: 4/7/2013 8:53:00 PM
This was very very good. J
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Date: 4/7/2013 6:18:00 PM
Hi Leo, stopping by to congratulate your awesome win... I wonder what my mind lurks... LOL~ Congratulations in Seren's "what lurks within" contest. Always~ LINDA
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Date: 4/7/2013 6:13:00 PM
Great job congratulations.
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Date: 4/7/2013 9:43:00 AM
Leonora excellent imagery here and an outstanding write, good luck....David
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Date: 4/6/2013 10:32:00 PM
Hola, my sweet sis Leo, stopping by to say hi and comment your poem. :-) I love the imagery, and the different out take at the end of your poem. it is very cute and purrrrrfect... i love kittens... thank you for always having such good and entertaining poems. wish I was not always into free-verse poems... hope to hear from you soon... always~ Linda
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Date: 4/6/2013 5:59:00 PM
Hi Leonora, thanks 4 the kind visit. Im wishing you luck in the contest*Skat
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Date: 4/6/2013 1:45:00 AM
Excellent. Very inspirational write. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs
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Date: 4/2/2013 10:49:00 PM
just dropping by to say HI.
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Date: 4/2/2013 3:40:00 PM
Loved the twists and mystery in this Leonora ...good luck friend....donna
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Date: 4/1/2013 8:00:00 AM
A truly great poem, Leonora. I loved every word!
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Date: 4/1/2013 4:48:00 AM
great work here. love the imagination and vivid picture that you displayed in your writing. bravo A+
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Date: 3/31/2013 4:11:00 PM
Highly imaginative writing and then a big TWIST at the end there. I really like the sweet picture at the end. I wish you luck in this contest. It's one I never tried and you did great with it!
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Date: 3/31/2013 12:32:00 PM
This is a fascinating write, a truly inspirational poem my friend! I really enjoyed reading this awesome piece this afternoon! What a powerful ending to a lovely poem, Great Work!!
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Date: 3/31/2013 10:58:00 AM
- A exciting way to write it Leonora.... a sweet finish. - I enjoyed reading it, well written! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) <3 <3 <3
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