What If

There we were - veiled in the sheer-yet-semi-private aura of morning twilight; where only outlines can be seen but where everything is felt in its full strength and purity. In a sultry bed - overstuffed with lost time lost love and, now, repossessed love we embraced each other. Years have a way of tenderizing even the toughest hearts as fertile tears water emotions; the beauty of what was - was still there - ready to rupture its bubbled captivity.. but as the home star streamed in through the eastern window the curtain came down. Susan Ashley April 16, 2019 ~ Fifth Place ~ Contest: April 2019 Premier 9 (Fourteen Line Max) Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/7/2019 11:01:00 AM

Outstanding Poem! A FAV Panagiota

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/7/2019 6:15:00 PM

It please me greatly to know you enjoyed my poem, Panagiota. Thank you for the honor of your gracious comments and your fav. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Anisha Dutta

Date: 5/2/2019 9:03:00 AM

Emerald emotions wonderfully displayed. I am charmed. BIG CONGRATS. Love

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/5/2019 8:45:00 PM

Your beautiful comments and kind congrats are a joy to receive, Anisha. I'm so pleased you were charmed by my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 4/27/2019 5:02:00 AM

Congratulations Susan , your poetry is always so engaging and beautiful. Emotions are always on the forefront of every line, it was a pleasure delving into your pen's heart beat.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/29/2019 6:38:00 PM

The beauty of your comments touch my heart, dear Pixie. Thank you for your inspiring comments and kind congrats. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/26/2019 6:23:00 PM

Wonderful blur of sensuous musings. Congrats on your most deserving win, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/29/2019 6:37:00 PM

Your beautiful comments and kind congrats are a joy to receive, Line. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/26/2019 6:20:00 PM

gorgeous, Susan. Wonderful poem with a well deserved win. Congratulations.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/29/2019 6:36:00 PM

I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Andrea. Thank you for your wonderful comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Juliet Ligon

Date: 4/25/2019 7:23:00 PM

Enjoyed this sensual poem.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/29/2019 6:35:00 PM

Thank you for your lovely comments, Juliet. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/22/2019 5:02:00 PM

Hello Susan, all I can say is if it happened you would be happy. It did not happen so you woder what if...What would have been. have a nice day my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 4/24/2019 9:25:00 AM

Hello Susan Ashley, thank you.I enjoy your poetry Susan. I wish you warmest wishes to you. Have a nice day.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/22/2019 6:22:00 PM

Your perceptive comments are beautifully expressed, Darlene. Thank you for your your gracious visit and for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Ashley Conte

Date: 4/20/2019 10:48:00 AM

Your inviting poem leaves much for the reader to ponder upon the end or restoration of love.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/22/2019 6:30:00 PM

Thank you, Ashley, I’m so pleased that my poem led your imagination to wonder. Your gracious visit and insightful comments are a pleasure to receive. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 4/17/2019 3:17:00 PM

Unfortunately, even captivating dreams tend to come to an end too quickly for our liking, Susan. These same words apply to this beautiful poem which ended too soon! ~ Warm regards and hugs, my friend. // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:48:00 PM

Indeed, some dreams are not meant to last or come true, Paul, and sometimes maybe it's for the better.. Your insightful comments are such a joy to receive. Thank you for your encouraging and endearing presence, your thoughts are always captivating. Warmest wishes and hugs always, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 4/17/2019 3:05:00 PM

Exceptionally beautiful and deeply emotion revealing work my friend. Love whether it be new, old, regained or forever lost is the most precious and most powerful emotion. This truly is a gem shining in a well of heart's making! A fav ....

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:54:00 PM

My dear friend, your generous and shining comments and fave are treasured gifts and are such a joy to receive. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Robert. Your esteemed thoughts and precious feedback is uplifting and means so much to me. Thank you for sharing your gracious heart and kindness with me, my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes and blessings always.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

Date: 4/17/2019 3:03:00 PM

Show time...a nice build up...well expressed...Enjoyed...All the best Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:51:00 PM

It’s so wonderful to hear from you, Arturo. Thank you for your wonderful comments. Your lovely visit is most appreciated, mon ami.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 4/17/2019 8:36:00 AM

A charming write of lost and repossessed love..ready to rupture its bubbled captivity. You have a wonderful way with your words Susan..and you left it to the readers' imagination with your "what if" title and the ending line. A gifted writer you are!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:40:00 PM

Vijay, your generous praise inspires me to reach ever higher. I appreciate your lovely comments that truly touch my heart. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 4/16/2019 11:38:00 PM

As always, Susan, very evocative and involving poetry, very nicely done.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/19/2019 8:36:00 PM

As always, your presence here is deeply appreciated and your valued insight is cherished, Lawrence. Thank you for your precious comments, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan