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What a Mess

My world is falling I know there is no one That I can call on What a mess What a moron There is an ice box Where my heart used to be It’s so cold I used to love I used to be bold What a mess The warmth is gone I saw the note That you wrote It said “Dear John Right or wrong By the time you Read this note I’ll be gone What a mess I went from blessed To the depressed The crumpled note In my closed fist, I pressed I can barely make it to the car With a bleeding chest…

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 4/20/2017 9:47:00 PM
Hi phatt. Good write. Great expressions of depression. Hope it is fiction. If not, remember that there are those who specializes in turning messes into blessings.
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Date: 4/21/2017 4:02:00 PM
Thanks it is fiction
Date: 3/18/2017 8:24:00 AM
Wow Phatt, that certainly sets the mood. Hope it's a fictional write. Cheers, Doug.
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Date: 3/19/2017 3:22:00 PM
Hi Doug thank you and yes it is fiction. I had been trying my hand at fiction for a while but didn't quite nailed it...
Date: 3/3/2017 8:42:00 PM
Excellent!
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Date: 3/4/2017 11:51:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comment.~phatt
Date: 1/21/2017 7:41:00 AM
Powerful Matt, great images.
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Date: 1/22/2017 1:22:00 PM
thank you phil~Matt

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