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Weep Willow Weep

Weep willow weep your weary winter woe At the sight of your icy, new trousseau, Above the frosted brook, a mirror faux Her reflection was horribly so-so, With rigid branches laced in flakey snow White, a favorite color, not hers though, Clear crystals clung, dressing her to and fro All stitched on by a hand who did not sew, Frozen stiff, her tears slow their new tempo. (November 8th, 2022)

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Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/2/2022 10:37:00 AM

So plaintive and melancholy a picture of the willow in winter Kelly. Interesting rhymes. Congratulations on your win. All the best.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/30/2022 3:42:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sam

W J Clarke

Date: 12/1/2022 12:11:00 PM

I can feel the cold mood surrounding this beautiful written poem. Really well expressed. Congratulations!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/17/2022 10:28:00 AM

Thank you so much!

Len Gasun

Date: 12/1/2022 8:02:00 AM

Such a very beautiful and well-crafted monorhyme poem with alliteration my dearest friend, Kelly. I extremely enjoyed reading your poem this evening. Congratulations on your win! Thank you so much for sharing. God bless. Hugs

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2022 4:04:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment so kindly, my dear friend, Len... Glad you enjoyed this one... Hugs :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/1/2022 7:52:00 AM

Dear Kelly, your poetic finesse captures the mood of the wintry weeping willow with finesse. I enjoyed your rich textured imagery, especially, "Above the frosted brook, a mirror faux" - whoa! Such great monorhymes throughout. Congratulations for your excellent win in William's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2022 3:49:00 PM

Thank you so much, Susan... Glad you enjoyed this one!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 12/1/2022 5:13:00 AM

Beautiful writing. Hearing from you after a long time. Congratulations!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2022 3:48:00 PM

Thank you very, very much!

Heidi Sands

Date: 12/1/2022 4:06:00 AM

Congratulations for your win :)

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2022 3:46:00 PM

Thank you, Heidi :)

Hilo Poet

Date: 11/30/2022 9:50:00 PM

An eloquent metaphorical monorhyme you have penned, Kelly. My compliments on your top placing win, Aloha William

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2022 7:57:00 AM

Thank you, William... It was a pleasure to participate in your contest. I enjoyed the challenge!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/15/2022 3:52:00 AM

So very descriptive is this one. I do enjoy seeing weeping willows. I had one my back yard, but it started dying and we had to remove it. You have done a very good job on giving some personification to this willow and the ice and snow. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara

Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/4/2022 10:17:00 AM

You're welcome, my friend, always a pleasure... Thank you, too, for taking the time to read and comment so kindly on my poems...

Eve Roper

Date: 11/8/2022 9:20:00 PM

Great verse, Kelly. It is chilling cold

Kelly Deschler
Date: 11/19/2022 4:06:00 PM

Thank you Eve... This poem was inspired by my Mom. She doesn't mind the winter, but she dreads having to drive in the snow and the freezing cold.

Stephan McBride

Date: 11/8/2022 5:52:00 PM

Very good, love it

Kelly Deschler
Date: 11/19/2022 3:34:00 PM

Thank you Stephan