Waterfall

From high up The rushing water leaps A daring dive into the unknown. Unrestrained It tumbles down, eyes closed Savouring the adrenalin rush Of bold youth; It flows in breathless flight Crystalline streaks of exuberance. Deafening The roar of fulfilment As waters meet and avidly merge. -------------------------------------------------- Paul Callus ~ 29th October, 2014 Form: Parallelogram de Crystalline. [It consists of 4 stanzas of 3 lines each. The syllable count for each stanza is 3, 6, 9.] Contest: Some Form Of Crystalline Sponsor: nette onclaud Placed: 4th

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Susan Ashley

Date: 11/28/2017 7:45:00 PM

A very sexy and enticing write Paul. In my mind, this creates the image of two people falling quite madly and lustily in love with each other with a wild and reckless abandon.. your imagery is enthralling, exhilarating, exciting and breathtaking.., yes, sounds like falling madly in love to me.. :) Congrats for the win! Warmest wishes always my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/29/2017 8:27:00 AM

A most insightful 'dissertation' Susan! Your interpretation and awesome adjectives have left me breathless:) Thank you for being such a supportive and good friend. ~ Warm regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/9/2014 11:51:00 AM

I see luck was not needed, congratulations Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 12:48:00 PM

Thank you Richard....I do my best; you are very kind! // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/9/2014 4:22:00 AM

"A daring dive into the unknown" I really like the idea of that.. kind of like taking a leap of faith. So happy to see this poem on the winner's list Paul. Congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 5:23:00 AM

I am pleased by the way you define my dive into the unknown! It's the positive side of feedback:) You too did very well with your Divine Cascade. Have a lovely Sunday. // paul

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 11/8/2014 8:30:00 AM

You really brought your years of experience into play here and that does the Magic; congrats Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 3:39:00 PM

Many thanks Kayod5; I really appreciate your complimentary comments! // paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 11/8/2014 8:04:00 AM

I love this one Paul. I can just see a young man diving into a beautiful waterfall. Congratulations on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 4:17:00 PM

Nice picture, Brenda.....as she awaits with open loving arms! Thanks for a lovely visit! // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/7/2014 2:06:00 AM

freshly woven to entice, indeed, paul... a different angle for the theme.. thank you for being part of my contest with my sweet congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 4:33:00 PM

Hi Nette! Once again I must thank you for having me on your winners' list; I love fresh and challenging forms...they tend to open new avenues and elicit unexplored ideas. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/6/2014 9:57:00 PM

a youthful and sexy waterfall this one was for sure, Paul. BIG congrats on your well deserved win.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 4:29:00 PM

Thank you Andrea; this contest has been enriched by a good number of worthy and inspired entries. Enjoy your weekend. // paul

Debra Squyres

Date: 11/6/2014 9:28:00 PM

I think you have captured the youthful exuberance of the falls so well in this. Wonderful take on the theme !! Congratulations !!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 4:20:00 PM

Many thanks Debra! Your visit and lovely comments are much appreciated. Your top winning entry captured my heart, too! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/6/2014 3:25:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 4:00:00 PM

Thank you Jan...your support, as always, is much appreciated. hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/6/2014 2:41:00 PM

Back to Congratulate you on your win Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 3:57:00 PM

Thank you Maurice; just been reading your winning entry...much enjoyed! // paul

Sneha Rv

Date: 11/6/2014 10:38:00 AM

Very descriptive poem - I loved it very much! I am sure this will win! Sneha

Paul Callus
Date: 11/8/2014 3:59:00 PM

Thank you for the faith you have shown in my poem, Sneha! Your judgment proved to be correct! Enjoy your weekend. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/5/2014 6:01:00 AM

An incredible write. Just awesome!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/5/2014 5:35:00 PM

Thank you Maurice! I appreciate your 'awesome' comment:) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/2/2014 10:53:00 PM

This is stunning Paul! Searching for new accolades to bestow....alas, beautiful and breathless will have to suffice. Awesome imagery!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/5/2014 5:38:00 PM

Wow Connie!! You too are lovely and charming for the way you react to my waterfall poem! I can't thank you enough...you left me breathless:) Take care. // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/1/2014 7:01:00 AM

Reads like a winner..A very different way to go for the contest..A unique one is great..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 11/1/2014 7:58:00 AM

Thank you Sara; I read yours and it also has its own unique, personal touch. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Sports Man

Date: 10/31/2014 3:40:00 PM

Very good writer Paul, waterfalls with clean, pure water

Paul Callus
Date: 10/31/2014 4:03:00 PM

Thank you SM; so pleased you enjoyed. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/31/2014 12:18:00 AM

You made me feel like I was the waterfall merging unbeknownst with the waters below. Anticipation through out and the way you worded the end it just seemed... inevitable. Very captivating, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/31/2014 4:34:00 AM

You are a faithful disciple to poetry reading, Timothy! You read and think and leave insightful comments...I like! Thank you for another fruitful visit. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/30/2014 9:32:00 PM

wow you had some pretty good lines in this one, Paul. WELL DONE!!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/31/2014 4:31:00 AM

Thank you Andrea! I'm pleased with your reaction...you know I value your comments...they serve as a reliable pointer:) Have a lovely day! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/30/2014 7:43:00 PM

I enjoyed your use of personification. Good luck in Nette's contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/31/2014 4:27:00 AM

I'm pleased this poem passed your test, Richard! Thanks for stopping by. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/30/2014 9:27:00 AM

Thankyou for taking me to your waterfall Paul..I can feel its freshness and hear every sound-Just beautiful!Waterfalls enchant my eyes,so this beauty.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/30/2014 12:34:00 PM

So pleased you enjoyed my cascading waterfall, Charm! Massive waterfalls are enchanting, but even smaller ones can be as beautiful. Thank you...love your kind and lovely comments:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/30/2014 5:05:00 AM

wow!!! i feel the waterfall next to my skin with this! love it Pual.. :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/30/2014 8:08:00 PM

hahahahha you know me well huh :P :D well waterfalls certainly a breathtaking gift of nature.. :D!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/30/2014 12:38:00 PM

Thank you for 'loving' my waterfall Olive_eloi! I love the tune that different waterfalls are capable of playing. Hugs // plua...alup...lupa...apul...Paul :)))

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/30/2014 5:06:00 AM

lols.. am sorry for the spelling of your name.. Paul.. PAul PAul, PAUL!,, :D ;)