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Waning Life

WANING LIFE (Terzenelle) When you opened your eyes you found you’re old! Your dreams remained unfulfilled, thoughts still crude; Wizened, your hands are quivering with cold!! Not long before you were in sprightly mood. You thought of wading through the oceans blue. Your dreams remained unfulfilled, thoughts still crude. Of life and death you thought of finding clues! To end the wars and find the peace, you mused!! You thought of wading through the oceans blue!!! Now mind is creased; imagery is bruised; Your pen is blunt and papers turned brittle! To end the wars and find the peace, you mused!! You churned and creamed the life, but too little! When you opened your eyes you found you’re old!! Your pen is blunt and papers turned brittle; Wizened, your hands are quivering with cold!!!

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Date: 8/13/2011 9:35:00 AM
interesting use of form, you need a note at the base saying which acronym you are relating the verse content too? ac?dc?bc? ad? thanks!
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Date: 8/8/2011 7:20:00 AM
A warm welcome to PoetrySoup I offer to you Mydavolu. I wish for you the best in your writing endeavors whatever they may be. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets. Read and comment on their's and they will return in kind. May the sun shine on you that you might find great joy in your life. Love and blessing always, Carol
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Date: 8/7/2011 11:33:00 PM
This is a really nice piece... the exclamation points distractingly draw attention to the author rather than the subject, but otherwise is a fine specimen of a difficult form. T
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Date: 8/7/2011 10:56:00 PM
nice poem
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