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Waltz of the Shell Creatures

Darkness sheets humped dunes where shelled siblings scrabble upward bearing heavy tide sands; sea waves flourish primeval baton directing perilous beach shuffle . . . salt waters christen coined swimmers. Lost years, like discarded seashells, litter pathways to maturity . . . settled in sea grass meadows, peaceful green sea turtles graze, waltzing to ancient inherent signals of life's renewing circle. The decades pass . . . their tears blended with boundless weight of ocean . . . weeping for brothers extinct. Copyright, July 31, 2014 Faye Gibson

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Date: 8/14/2014 1:15:00 PM
Excellent write. I love it. Happy Writing and God bless you.
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Date: 8/9/2014 11:02:00 AM
Well deserved win and big congrats to you!
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Date: 8/8/2014 9:39:00 AM
Excellent! Well, done, Faye. Congratulations on your placement!
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Date: 8/7/2014 11:09:00 PM
this one was my very favorite of all the turtle poems I had read. BIG congrats. I adore this one.
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Date: 8/7/2014 5:37:00 AM
Back wid huge congrats on ur awesome win Faye!
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Date: 8/7/2014 4:57:00 AM
This is an excellent and touching 'walz', Faye. Love your "Lost years, like discarded seashells"! Congratulations on a much deserved win. // paul
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Date: 8/7/2014 3:07:00 AM
Faye, a marvelous write on turtles - full of imagery. Congrats on fine top win. Mohan
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Date: 8/7/2014 2:04:00 AM
Just beautiful Faye, congratulations.
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Date: 8/6/2014 10:46:00 PM
Gorgeous, Faye. Blew me away. Congrats on your win... Your first line is so well whittled. This is what I call truly figurative language... yet in no way opaque. You know, I even liked the ellipses, as for me they echo the sentiments and tone of your poem. The dots recall the tears and shells, very effective. Profound and powerful. Cheers, Cyndi
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Date: 8/2/2014 10:27:00 PM
Faye,but i DID see this amazing poem. My comment is here, from when I saw it last night right before midnight. It has to do well in the contest, I just know it. The judge loves this kind of poetry too.
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Date: 8/1/2014 8:56:00 AM
Dear Faye, your comparison of lost years to discarded seashells is awesome. to the end of the poem heart becomes heavy for brothers extinct. Best wishes!
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Date: 8/1/2014 4:20:00 AM
Deep n thoughtful write Faye,, you say it all till extinction my dear friend ,, good luck to u !
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Date: 7/31/2014 11:26:00 PM
well, my dear, I am not the judge of this contest, but knowing charlotte, the way she writes and what she seems to favor in good poetry, I am pretty sure this one will be HIGH on her list! Awesome, just awesome. And hey, thanks so much for the book. I got it yesterday!
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Date: 7/31/2014 5:55:00 PM
Very beautiful piece, Faye. 'Lost years, like discarded seashells, litter pathways to maturity'....wow, simply stunning verse. David
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