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Walking Amidst a Dream

lost in the haze on a day of days yet with no fear I get nearer to near not knowing where im going no path is showing everything seems so real to touch or feel but what i feel inside says its a lie to be tried but I yearn so bad to have something I havent had in so long, ive tried but i was wrong with this sense of reality goes my irrationality no doubts,fears, or tears letting go of the wheel that steers and in that moment im free to simply be me to say what i cant say any other day to try a feat with no fear of defeat to take what i yearn without the lesson to learn but its a fact of life there will always be strife weighing the odds praying to the gods fate changes everyday by the words u choose to say life is all about chance and circumstance patience is key in every difficult victory a win is a win for every washed up has-been savor it while it last for tommorrow its the past its always a bummer to wake from a slumber to accept you lost to any cost you cant win em all even the best will sometimes fall lost in the haze on a day of days hoping you'll be my light on this darkest of nights that you'll light my way to the dawn of each day while everything is as it may seem while walking amidst a dream through my rationality you are my reality

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Date: 5/11/2010 7:13:00 AM
Since you like my input I will give you alot..just keep realizing..I know..it's only my opinion and don't even believe in the concept of right & wrong..1st take..I like how nothing is capitalized or punctuated IF the verse itself has a totla disregard for structure as a core message..now I'll read ;)
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Date: 5/11/2010 7:13:00 AM
ah ha! it is a topic which feels comfey without punctuation or capitalization...NOW the only time you did punctuate was on you'll..."you'll light my way to the dawn of each day" if this was with intent to focus and the you'll is God or a significant other...it works! This topic is a favorite of mine, try Duh? and When Madness Rides on Moonlight they are both meant to make the reader experience being "touched" or a bit crazy...and the good company they're in!
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Date: 1/27/2010 5:10:00 PM
Mike, this is very good! All things do pass, but the one constant is the Creator. Are you so busy that you havent written another good one sind you last posted? Write, write so you can inspire someone! Thanks for sharing your gift and thanks for your kind comment on my poem! Peace, Audrey
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Date: 1/15/2010 9:10:00 PM
Nice poem...Enjoyed...Marty
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