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Waiting For the Funeral

How many times had she celebrated longed for his coming death sat imagining her great freedom the wealth she so richly deserved No more of his groping hungering for her essence she had satisfied him many times treated him to all her portals pleasured him to the altar He denied her nothing her aspirations went higher than her skirt how long would this sentence last certainly longer than their conversations he was fluent in the art of need she had thought of killing him yet she lacked the will hoping he might take one too many blue pills So she could ride him to her dreams suffocate him with one final kiss her appetite for love unrestrained she desired her pleasure mixed with pain he couldn't hurt her in the ways that mattered she found her release in the arms of another not all things done in the dark remain secret A young woman died today a terrible accident we're told his assistant is there to comfort him they'll be engaged in just a few short weeks after all, the man has his needs For the "Poet III poetry contest." By Richard Lamoureux

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Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/11/2014 9:17:00 PM

You have me laughing, a work in progress indeed! Fantastic, You should show both versions!!! Loved this, just goes to show there is a reward for reading poems more than once!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/24/2014 8:20:00 AM

Sorry I missed this comment arthur. A belated thanks.

Donna Jones

Date: 5/9/2014 9:01:00 PM

Wow..where did this come from? Haha...this one woke me up tonight Richard...:-) :-) :-) awesome

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/7/2014 6:11:00 PM

Reminded me of the Great Gatsby. Thank you for your support. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/7/2014 8:57:00 PM

My pleasure Matthew.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 5/7/2014 1:21:00 PM

This story is thought capturing Rick. You wove the patterns expertly. I enjoyed this reading. Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/7/2014 1:42:00 PM

;0) thanks, I am pleased you enjoyed my story.

Robert Pettit

Date: 5/6/2014 11:13:00 PM

A very imaginative write that could inspire a good movie or television show.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/7/2014 8:03:00 AM

Thanks Robert.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/6/2014 5:51:00 PM

Wow, GREAT twist. and here I was rooting for the dame. hahaha. This put me in mind of the ID shows I love to watch so much. Do you watch those shows? this kind of stuff is always happening. True stories and stranger than fiction. Loved this.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/7/2014 8:02:00 AM

Sad but true, each is a predator of sorts.

Ivo Cos

Date: 5/6/2014 12:04:00 PM

You, Sir, come up with truly unique & original poems AND titles. A most admirable piece.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/7/2014 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Ivo.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 5/6/2014 6:10:00 AM

Wonderful twist at the end. Evil thoughts breed evil deeds.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/6/2014 7:23:00 AM

Hi Monterey, it's always nice to have you visit.

Richard Palmer

Date: 5/5/2014 1:15:00 PM

enjoy every line,love the twist,from the wife situation to the husband victory lol,great Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/5/2014 2:59:00 PM

A certain poetic justice. Thanks for commenting Richard.

Sam Toil

Date: 5/5/2014 12:38:00 PM

Hi Rick. Yes indeed, you have sketched well two predators of selfish need. I love the way you executed this poem from the point of view of the desperate woman. That she was evil. And then you turn the tables in the end. So that we see the evil in the man as well. Well done my friend! Peace...Ben

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/5/2014 1:11:00 PM

Two morally bankrupt souls. I'm pleased you like my little tale.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/5/2014 10:25:00 AM

i am touched by the depth of your soul, rich.. amazing!.. hugggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/5/2014 1:12:00 PM

Hugs back and a big thanks!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/5/2014 7:00:00 AM

hi Rick hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/5/2014 8:24:00 AM

Hi back Shadow. Big hug as well.

Justin Bordner

Date: 5/4/2014 8:20:00 PM

Amusing irony Richard. Comprehensive morbidity, well expressed. I like how you display her arrogancein the line, " He ccouldn't hurt her in the ways that mattered..."

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/5/2014 8:26:00 AM

I was reffering to her desire for rough sex. Thanks for commenting Justin.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/4/2014 12:19:00 PM

I sometimes wonder at what inspires you. Often I know it is the contest theme, but then, there are poems like this that just leave me wondering....Interesting and captivating write.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2014 6:57:00 PM

Would you like some butter on the next batch?

Eileen Manassian
Date: 5/4/2014 3:38:00 PM

Keep that popcorn of ideas popping away! ;)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2014 3:34:00 PM

I have no idea, things just pop into my head sometimes.

Kelly Deschler

Date: 5/3/2014 9:23:00 PM

I really liked that twist at the end. I was not expecting that! A very dramatic and dark story that was written and told very well. Great work, Richard!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2014 9:36:00 AM

Thanks Kelly.

Brooke Dylan

Date: 5/3/2014 8:36:00 PM

Richard wow oh wow amazing writing.. very line is a masterpiece.. very word.. wonderful.. you have a way with words..So she could ride him to her dreams suffocate him with one final kiss... AMAZING... Brooke

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2014 9:37:00 AM

You are kind Brooke, Thanks for visiting, you are welcome any time.

Cherl Dunn

Date: 5/3/2014 4:42:00 PM

WOW this is a an interesting write but i know a few women like this it's such a waste of life in a nut shell, in a situation like this their is know winner at all, great poem but it's a sad truth of anytime. cheri

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/3/2014 7:24:00 PM

Thanks Cheri, this was a fun one to write.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/3/2014 3:59:00 PM

love the twist Rick great pen hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/3/2014 7:25:00 PM

Thanks Shadow, it is good I can surprise you.