Waiting

He never did come but his sweet moments always drived me crazy. My madness became so wild with a desire to meet him yesterday and today destroyed my peace forever. I heard someone at the door and thought that god have listened my prayer. And when opened I see that the harsh wind ridiculed and left me unsaid...

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 5/16/2016 11:45:00 AM

Welcome to PS, Randhir ... hope you enjoy yourself on the site with this wonderful community of poets. Not a bad first poem ... suggestive of a longer story and dashed hopes.

Randhir Kaur
Date: 5/16/2016 1:13:00 PM

Thanks Hicks. Yeah next time better for sure dear..

Moon Flower

Date: 5/14/2016 7:19:00 AM

That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Randhir. :)

Randhir Kaur
Date: 5/15/2016 10:30:00 AM

Thanks Moon for your appreciation.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/12/2016 11:13:00 AM

Randhir, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Randhir Kaur
Date: 5/15/2016 10:17:00 AM

Hey thank you so much..hoping to enjoy your company dear Linda. I will surely have a look. Very soon.

Manmath Dalei

Date: 5/12/2016 9:18:00 AM

Randhir, Nice and wonderful first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Hope you will enjoy our community. Wish you a fruitful journey ahead...........//:) with love

Randhir Kaur
Date: 5/16/2016 1:15:00 PM

Thank you Manmath for your kind wishes..

Skat A

Date: 5/12/2016 8:30:00 AM

PS, just a little note, Rabdhir, this is not a ballad. You might want to list this under the I DON'T KNOW FORM. SO WILD..... SKAT

Randhir Kaur
Date: 5/15/2016 10:09:00 AM

Thank you SKAT for warm welcome and love..Nice to meet you poetess. Actually this simply a melancholy poem but my screen is not allowing to show more categories so I chose one which is not at all valid category... sorry for it dear..ping you very soon.. Regards_Kaur_

Skat A

Date: 5/12/2016 8:28:00 AM

Randhir,, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT