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Fastening my grip on you, throwing my head up high Where colours fight in sunlight bright enough to blind me Vortices, one after another, dizzyingly maelstroms of words disappear unspoken Will they drown me those waves, will they drown me can I come up and breathe again? can I hold on and survive? Waves riding the board with you blue sky opens to warm glow of the sunlight from where I am the shore is near I relax, while you steer small waves rippling lulling me to sleep *** August 22, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Douglas Maes

Date: 10/4/2017 3:03:00 PM

This is awesome :) I love your poems. You seem like a pretty cool guy!

Darren White
Date: 10/5/2017 1:17:00 AM

Thank you so much :)

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 8/25/2017 11:36:00 AM

I remember going to Niagara Falls and watching the whirpool below the falls. There was a cable car you could take that rode out over the water. Shoreside was enough for me. your poem just popped that memory into my mind as clear as day. It is so descriptive of the fears I had as a child of falling into the maelstrom. The water mesmerized me, called to me. Thank you for the poem. It will be a favourite if you don't mind.

Darren White
Date: 8/26/2017 9:21:00 AM

I am absolutely delighted that you favourite my poem, thank you so very much :)

Pashang Salehi

Date: 8/24/2017 11:53:00 AM

Your idea is as great as the image you created....

Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/1/2017 8:41:00 PM

Always.....

Darren White
Date: 8/26/2017 9:20:00 AM

Thank you :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/22/2017 10:17:00 PM

I sure can relate to this one!! Great poem!

Darren White
Date: 8/23/2017 1:14:00 AM

Thanks my friend :)

Dean Wood

Date: 8/22/2017 10:53:00 AM

First stanza is a dizzyingly maelstrom of words! Second stanza let me off the hook. You have a great talent for tugging the reader where you want them to go. Great Job Darren! And thanks for the help on the free verse. -- Dean

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 11:09:00 AM

Thanks Dean! Leading people on in poetry I enjoy indeed. And no thanks needed about the Free Verse.

Lin Lane

Date: 8/22/2017 7:01:00 AM

It seems you survived and now you're breathing all those words in the most fantastic waves of poetry for all to read.

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 11:08:00 AM

Yeah :) Thanks so much Lin.

Tim Smith

Date: 8/22/2017 6:46:00 AM

Many contemplations present themselves before we ride off on our wave... terrific my friend

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 11:07:00 AM

Thanks my friend :)

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/22/2017 5:54:00 AM

Great write my friend. May also describe time waves as they wash over you , eventually wearing your life force down until that final huge wave washes you away.. I love such deep poems when so well composed! A fav...

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 11:06:00 AM

Thank you my friend, also for the fav :)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/22/2017 4:31:00 AM

Deep poem, Darren, glad you found rest:)

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 11:06:00 AM

Thanks Jo :)

Sara Ella

Date: 8/22/2017 3:10:00 AM

I love the idea of a maelstrom of words Darren :) A wonderful poem!

Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 11:05:00 AM

Thanks Sara :)