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March 4, 2018

This poem is dedicated to Marissa Kennedy, a 10 year old child in Maine, who died of child abuse at the hands of her step-father and mother in 2018. My heavy heart goes out to the vulnerable victims of child abuse who suffer, endure, and unfortunately die when families, schools, society and "the system", set up to protect them, ultimately fails them. Rest in peace, dear Marissa.

~ Second Place ~
Premiere Contest: Your Choice Again
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~Third Place~
Premiere Contest: Favorite Free Verse (not for contest)
Sponsor: Laura Loo

~ Poem of The Day ~
March 5, 2018

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Her trembling twilight dims with streaking purple tears bruised by youthful years of bleeding pain hurting but never hugged -- locked in the arms of atmosphere’s apathy that smeared with fiendish fingers a contusing plum palette across any hope in her godforsaken horizon ~ this sorrowful songbird who sings with the shattered purity of violin strains falling from Heaven finds her bemoaning musical notes adrift - lost on breezy deaf days as she is once again thrown down from the self-serving skyscape by the hateful hands of wildcat winds. In the deep inkwell of lullaby-less lonely nights where never a tender nursery rhyme has ever set her free are memories scribed of storm-battered days and weighing heavily on Libra’s scales are the injustices of dreams she will never live nor flights of fancy she will never take as her scorching sire of solar flares and withering warpaths sleeps soundly on a bloated bed over-stuffed with betrayal and broken promises while merciless maternal moonbeams do not wander the coal-colored haze with a lantern’s sharp beam cutting the darkness to find her frail fractured form lost in the eclipsed puckered pleats of blood-red mistress’s skirts. Tonight, a stricken sparrow folds her fledgling wings never to fly again… will the careless skies miss her?

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Date: 1/18/2024 2:58:00 PM
Having invested a great deal of my life working with the Foster Care System, your words struck deep and mightily. It was hard to swallow after reading it. It is in itself a masterpiece of empathy. I applaud this wonderful effort!!! Health and Happiness Lonna
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Date: 1/20/2024 8:39:00 AM
Dear Lonna, it's wonderful to see you! Thank you for sharing in the heavy emotions of this heartbreaking poem with me. I can see why this piece would have touched the depth and breadth of your being so completely. Your soulful comments are both moving and highly valued. Thank you my poetic friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 1/6/2024 1:40:00 PM
I remember this...would have been my number one...Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 1/9/2024 12:02:00 PM
Dear Silent One, I know you feel a great empathy for the "stricken sparrows" who suffer the sorrows and pain of child abuse. Thank you for having faith in my poetry. Your valued words are my "golden trophy". Your gracious comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated, dear poet. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 1/6/2024 7:10:00 AM
Your "stricken sparrow" reached out to me and broke my heart for all the millions she represents. CONGRATS on your win with this vividly descriptive piece, Susan. Janice
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Date: 1/9/2024 11:57:00 AM
Dear Janice, thank you for sharing in the sad emotions of this poem with me. The beauty of your empathy shines for the all of the "stricken sparrows" Marissa represents. Your gracious visit and kind congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 1/6/2024 6:20:00 AM
Your exceptional ability to craft a truly remarkable poem, replete with vivid imagery, seamless rhythm, and boundless imagination, is truly awe-inspiring, dear Susan. The profound emotional resonance of your words has resonated deeply within me, as you have artfully depicted the human experience with such poignant clarity. It is no surprise that your poem has garnered the coveted title of "POTD" and I extend my heartfelt congratulations.
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Date: 1/9/2024 12:13:00 PM
Dear Lasaad, thank you for sharing in the sad emotions and imagery of this poem. Your empathy shines. This poem is very near and dear to my heart as I empathize greatly with the horrific plight of all the "stricken sparrows" of child abuse. Though she lived in another state and I didn't know her, Marissa's tragic story in the news touched me very deeply. Nearly six years later I still think about her and her suffering. Your thoughtful critique of my poem is encouraging and I am honored to receive your valued comments and your kind congrats. Thank you once again, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/6/2024 6:20:00 AM
Your masterful use of metaphors and impeccable choice of language adds a layer of exquisite beauty to this already exceptional piece. Your eloquent and skillful portrayal of the anguish and desolation experienced by someone who has endured profound suffering, bereft of affection and understanding, is truly captivating. Congratulations on your contest win.
Date: 3/26/2018 8:28:00 AM
Lovely imagery here Susan Ashley.
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Date: 3/26/2018 3:58:00 PM
Thank you Martins Deep, for the delight of your visit and your heartwarming comment. It's a pleasure to meet you.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/25/2018 11:40:00 PM
The alliteration in this image-laden poem is the result of a refined word player, who has pulled out all of the stops. Good for you, you have gone for it, and it's perfection, Susan.
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Date: 3/26/2018 4:03:00 PM
Caren, your amazing comments are refreshing and uplifting. Your sentiments are truly beautiful and sincerely appreciated. Thank you for your lovely kindness, my friend. Warmest wishes. ~ Susan
Date: 3/22/2018 11:40:00 AM
Back with congratulations again for your well deserved win Susan in Laura’s contest with your excellent poem. :))
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Date: 3/22/2018 4:07:00 PM
Thank you Roy for your wonderful comments and warmhearted congrats. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/22/2018 11:29:00 AM
Such dramatic verse in your excellent free verse, Susan! Congrats on your win :)
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Date: 3/22/2018 4:06:00 PM
Your precious thoughts are so very appreciated Laura. Thank you for your kind words and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/22/2018 6:07:00 AM
wow! amazing poem sweet lady, everything about it is so emotive and the imagery is great too :) thank you and congratulations! :)-luloo
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Date: 3/22/2018 8:13:00 AM
Luloo, your lovely comments are cherished. Thank you for the honor of my wonderful placement in your contest and for your heartwarming congrats. Your sponsorship is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/14/2018 10:07:00 PM
Whilst I was reading it, I was thinking it should be POTD or POTW. And it was a POTD... Yey, congrats my friend! It's such a magnificent piece. Emotional but of course SO BEAUTIFUL :) With all my loves ~ Kina ~
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Date: 3/16/2018 1:47:00 PM
Hi my wonderful friend! Thank you, Kina, for your enthusiastic encouragement and support of my poetry. Your approval means the world to me. I relish your beautiful thoughts and deeply appreciate your heartfelt congrats. Hugs and sizzle love to you always, dearest friend. ~Su
Date: 3/13/2018 9:40:00 AM
Congrats on your POTD, Susan. Such a dark emotionally charged write. Beautifully done.
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Date: 3/13/2018 11:22:00 AM
Thank you Line for your heartwarming congrats and wonderful comments. Your encouraging sentiments are always truly appreciated! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/13/2018 2:10:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on POTD Susan. This is such a beauty! : )
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Date: 3/13/2018 11:20:00 AM
I cherish your lovely comments and kind congrats Connie. Thank you! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/12/2018 5:37:00 PM
Trilling poetry, Susan; l love the violin, have several but barely can play one well. Though every now and then I surprise myself with a beautiful trill. Music comes from the soul of life--every beautiful work, a happiness...and every sad one, a wingless sparrow or a child left to wonder of misery and truth. Maybe even question God. Atheists are made not born. Gorgeous sensitivity in this work of yours. Outstanding imagery!
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Date: 3/13/2018 11:19:00 AM
Joe, your comments are filled with illuminating and beautiful insights. I truly admire your wonderful intellect and spirituality and I relish your thoughtful sentiments and visits my friend.. Your appreciation for my work just thrills me!! Thank you! Warmest wishes always. ~Susan
Date: 3/12/2018 7:05:00 AM
The touchingly beautiful last four lines I like the most ... congratulations on the POTD , Susan ...
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Date: 3/13/2018 11:11:00 AM
Dear Probir, your visit and heartfelt comments are deeply appreciated. Thank you for your kindhearted congrats and for your cherished friendship.. ~Susan
Date: 3/11/2018 2:32:00 PM
such an engaging piece worthy of a POTD, susan... congrats and huggs
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Date: 3/11/2018 7:19:00 PM
Thank you Nette for the delight of your visit and your wonderful comments. Your kind congrats are treasured as well. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2018 11:03:00 PM
So beautiful and emotional! Great write Susan!-Paulina
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Date: 3/11/2018 11:02:00 AM
Your lovely visit is a delight Paulina. Thank you for your precious thoughts with your wonderful comments. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2018 5:53:00 PM
such a poignant poem Susan and belated congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/10/2018 7:01:00 PM
Thank you Jan for your lovely thoughts and kindhearted congrats. I relish your heartfelt comments and delight in your visit. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2018 10:34:00 AM
love this beautiful & moving write, my friend
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Date: 3/10/2018 11:46:00 AM
Your beautiful comments are truly appreciated Jack. Your visit is a pleasure.. Thank you my friend. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2018 7:38:00 AM
Very emotive poem! Congrats on POTD
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Date: 3/10/2018 10:22:00 AM
Thank you Kim for your lovely visit.. Your wonderful comments and warmhearted congrats are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2018 7:13:00 AM
I relate to your sparrow, Susan. The depths of your poem touched my own with the feelings you so effectively painted. I see this was POTD and I congratulate you on same. Just beautiful, truly so. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 3/10/2018 10:30:00 AM
CayCay my dear friend, I hope all is well in your corner of the world. I've missed you! I'm so happy to see you here and I truly appreciate seeing your wonderful face and reading your heartfelt comments and kind congrats. Your lovely thoughts are cherished, as always, dear friend. Warmest wishes, love and hugs. ~Susan
Date: 3/9/2018 6:46:00 PM
Yes, I think the sky will miss her. You speak eloquently.
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Date: 3/10/2018 10:03:00 AM
Your lovely thoughts are cherished dear Richard. Thank you for your tender insight and your wonderful visit. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan
Date: 3/9/2018 6:09:00 AM
I JUST NOW FOUND THIS JEWEL MY FRIEND AND SEE THAT IT ALSO WON POTD ON MARCH 5TH--MY BIRTHDAY! Congratulations on POTD and writing such a majestic and meaningful piece!!!!! A fav.....
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Date: 3/9/2018 3:25:00 PM
Happy belated birthday, Robert. Thank you for your encouraging support. Both your kind congrats and fav are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
Date: 3/8/2018 8:38:00 AM
Beautiful poetic words which skillfully highlight the pain and sadness of a person who has suffered deeply, deprived of affection and understanding. Is death the only solution to her woes? Will she be missed? Like many others she'll fade into oblivion; hopefully she is at peace, comforted by heavenly strains. ~ Belated congrats on POTD, truly merited! ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 3/8/2018 7:02:00 PM
Thank you Paul for your wonderful comments. This poem was inspired by a local news story about a ten year old girl who died of child abuse at the hands of her parents and the system that failed her.. Her story moved me to tears (still does) and touched me very deeply. I believe she is comforted in Heaven with His eternal love and peace. I treasure your thoughts, my friend and you kind congrats as well. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
Date: 3/7/2018 5:29:00 AM
That was one of the most beautiful poems I've ever read
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Date: 3/7/2018 8:22:00 PM
I am truly touched your lovely comments Emily. I cherish your heartfelt sentiments. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/6/2018 8:17:00 PM
Such a beautiful poignant write Susan! Congratulations on your well deserved POTD; Awesome my friend!~Che :)
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Date: 3/6/2018 8:43:00 PM
Your lovely thoughts are cherished.. Thank you so much Che for your beautiful comments and your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes. ~Susan
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