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Violet

budding beauty blushing not coy but provocative adoring flowers kissed her lips with color wove a clasp to hold her long hair tattooed their image on her face she lives in a castle tower prisoner of a would-be lover scorned prince makes her dance weekly intoxicating lecherous men in his court they know she cannot be touched elegant crimson ring on her delicate finger prince’s claim on her well known nightly she stares at the moon enchanting celestial stars with her beauty as tears of loneliness fall knight on white steed approaches in dreams fights to free her from solitude fortress of stone weeps into its mote lithe and lean, Violet slips through the turret’s bars prepared to plunge into dark water magnificent eagles in flock rescue her grateful Violet winged to freedom now she dances nightly tantalizing only one man with her sultry ways loving knight who could not scale the citadel befriended savior eagles on a hilltop perch while gazing at her face bathed in moonlight
* For the “Tell Her Story” contest sponsored by Constance La France ~A Rambling Poet~ by Carolyn Devonshire

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Date: 11/23/2012 11:48:00 AM
At last I have found one I have I think Not made comment on Carolyn, I so Enjoyed the fantasy and desire you Showed so well dear friend; thinking of You, God keep you Joe..)
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Date: 4/29/2011 7:36:00 AM
Congratulations my dear friend for all the thriumps you have obtained in your field of endeavor. Thanks for reading mine. GBU always. Ernilando
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Date: 4/3/2011 6:47:00 PM
a beautiful write, enjoyed reading it.
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Date: 3/29/2011 9:56:00 AM
hi carols, how are you?? been missing your artful poems lately... any piece brewing??? take care! :) hugggs, nette
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Date: 3/14/2011 12:00:00 PM
Really like your version of "Tell Her Story", Carolyn! Tried to write something for this contest but it just would not come together in time...oh well:) Beautifully written! Thanks so much for your comments, very appreciated as always. So I captured that lapping water at the shoreline accurately, eh? Had to imagine that scene and sound as at the time I wrote that we still had a lot of snow! We're had a good bit of rain since then and now snow's nearly gone:)) Yay!!! Love Carol
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Date: 3/13/2011 7:23:00 PM
Congratulations on winning in the contest. Carolyn, this is one of your better free verse entries.
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Date: 3/11/2011 12:51:00 PM
my best congratulations, Carolyn, very romantic and dramatic, and made me think of Rapunzel but without the long hair-rope....your imagination is always fertile with fairytale poetry....sincerely... Syd
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Date: 3/11/2011 12:20:00 PM
Congratulations on the sixth place win in the contest of Constance, Carolyn
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Date: 3/11/2011 10:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your Violet winning in Constance's contest "Tell Her Story" Carolyn. Have a wonderful weekend. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/11/2011 9:09:00 AM
From the ivory tower to the gilded bower, that is the lucid dream of every fair damsel. A nice job presenting this fairy tale anew!
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Date: 3/11/2011 12:23:00 AM
sorry, I called these all couplets, Carolyn. I was noticing how you centered yours and it looked so much like the way I and some other poets had done their story in that format. It read so lyrically that for some reason, was thinking it rhymed! well, I think you gave yourself a lot more freedom to tell the story any way you wanted by doing it without rhyme. And this is a very well deserved win. Congratuations. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 3/10/2011 9:35:00 PM
a tale with poetic flights of freedom, caols... deserving of a HIGH WIN!! a baeuty.. :) huggs, nette
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Date: 3/10/2011 8:59:00 PM
Wonderful story as only you can tell it. Romantic and fanciful. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/10/2011 8:58:00 PM
Amazing and beautiful with lovely images. Many congratulations for this win.
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Date: 3/10/2011 5:58:00 PM
You made the a breath taking, yet sad fairy tale, Carolyn. Just a wonderful winning story of Violet!! Congratulations!! love, Carrie
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Date: 3/10/2011 5:51:00 PM
Nice writing, Carolyn. Congratulations on winning in the contest.
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Date: 3/10/2011 4:58:00 PM
this is a fantastic write ! i love it ! love always wins.
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Date: 3/10/2011 3:52:00 PM
I like the way the eagles save her as she tries to jump into the moat. In the picture she does seem to look "violet." Good luck in the contest. Best to you, Diane
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Date: 3/10/2011 3:01:00 PM
wowie, Carolyn. I really enjoyed this. You took it and FLEW with it. I know it's gotta do well. I too used rhyming couplets I think they work so well for these kinds fo stories, don't you?
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Date: 3/10/2011 2:11:00 PM
Yes, that worked - thanks, Carolyn. Nice bio - and very nice pic : ) Wow, 4 novels - that's pretty impressive. Do you stick to any particular genre? I've written quite a few short stories and some articles and they've been published in magazines, anthologies etc. I wrote a ghost novel last year but it's still looking for a home. Thanks again with the blogs - Dr Ram was just as I imagined him, but I was way off with everyone else : ) Jack
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Date: 3/10/2011 12:49:00 PM
Thanks, Carolyn. It's nice to put names to faces - can't see yours, though. Jack
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Date: 3/10/2011 12:19:00 PM
You brought Violet to life with this beauty Carolyn..simply awesome from the start.. Wish you all the best with this gem.. Love Wilma
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Date: 3/10/2011 11:56:00 AM
Wow, LOVE this. Good luck in the contest, take care of yourself. Dana'lynn
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Date: 3/10/2011 11:51:00 AM
The first two lines budding beauty blushing not coy but provocative.....enough enough more than enough in seven words even my seventy words will fall short, Cariolyn. Soup Mail!!!!
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Date: 3/10/2011 11:37:00 AM
Great romantic story..Good luck in the contest.Reads like winning material..Thanks for stopping by and letting me know that I placed in a contest..Sara
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