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View From the Top of the Trail

It’s an unknown journey, but I see a trail heading to the light of tomorrow There will often be times I'll be afraid, to go I may stumble a bit, with an eager heart And may tremble climbing cliffs of old sorrows There are deep, black chasms I will not forget, where slopes slick, with pitfalls, are waiting to trip But I've gone too far, and I can't turn around, Just as the sun can't turn its back on the day The trees speak in tongues, so foreign to my ears using parched, old voices, and tears from the sky Scraps of brittle leaves litter, with dust all around Mixed with words left unsaid, that I've left behind There’s a sharp mist of hope, at the bend of the river yet,sun on my face seems to lend, the slope of the rain, but the warmth of the sun with an open blue sky at the end _____________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/12/2014 2:29:00 PM
a deluge of intricate and breathtaking metaphors from your poetic climb, carrie... a round of big cheers on your high win..
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Date: 10/11/2014 9:27:00 PM
What a great view at the top of the trail...how many amazing metaphors I found along your journey! Great winning write!
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Date: 10/11/2014 4:08:00 PM
Ah pleasant free verse with to settle its unrhymic stance ends in simple rhyme (I too find myself doing this often ;) Congrad's on your win, Light & Love
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Date: 10/11/2014 11:20:00 AM
dropping back with my congratulations:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 10/11/2014 9:15:00 AM
And with the blue sky we find calm. Congratulations on your win Carrie.
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Date: 10/11/2014 9:05:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win.
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Date: 10/11/2014 7:27:00 AM
Wonderful journey Carrie! Third stanza my fav, congrats on big win!
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Date: 8/26/2014 7:41:00 PM
This is great, especially about the trees. Luck to ya.
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Date: 8/21/2014 5:15:00 PM
Congratulations, Carrie...I really thought this would be the top one.
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Date: 8/21/2014 10:25:00 AM
Excellent write...metaphorically speaking! Beautiful journey through life, with all its ups and downs. Congrats on a lovely and merited win, Carrie. // paul
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Date: 10/11/2014 8:00:00 AM
...and back for a second read and with merited congratulations on your win in Anthony's contest! // paul
Date: 8/21/2014 8:19:00 AM
great win, Carrie on a meaningful poem. Mohan
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Date: 8/21/2014 7:25:00 AM
wonderful metaphors and i love the final lines - a great win:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/21/2014 5:48:00 AM
Interesting poem to be pondered over, Carrie. congrats
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Date: 8/16/2014 7:53:00 PM
I adore poems with dark and light and this one is special Carrie. I especially love your last stanza with its clear imagery to ponder. Blessings, Connie
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Date: 8/16/2014 5:35:00 PM
May tremble climbing cliffs of old sorrows and the third verse...such beautiful writing, Carrie. You are one of my favs.
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Date: 8/16/2014 5:15:00 PM
love this very clever write, Carrie - and a wonderful upbeat end : )
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Date: 8/16/2014 11:41:00 AM
You give much hope here, Carrie, and as always with your own brand of imagery that is both beautiful and vivid at the same time. I especially liked your 4th stanza here, it's so rich for me. Thank you for passing by my poem with such inspiring words and haha also for bearing with my wordiness!
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Date: 8/16/2014 12:00:00 AM
Wonderful write Carrie ,, this wanderlust never should end,, else we stagnate,, n monotony is as gud as an end! gl in contest!
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