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Victor's Dance

How much I pride this wreath of gold, now vanquished in my war-torn soul asunder from that once lost flesh, receiving veil and fashioned mesh. Oh God, you’ve heard my numerous rhymes. my prayers in verse for wedded time. On that day I’d danced to you. For all my hopes have now come due. One dance to him who gave himself, a him for me, as no one else. And then to God, I’d strip my gown. With Holy Spirit then throw down. Like David when the ark was bought from foreign holders bravely sought, a rhythm dance to African beat on fresh bare soil with shoeless feet. You might ask “What crazy fool? A lovesick woman. Not too cool.” These words be spoken, if you dare. To God above my dance is prayer. 3.20.2023 “In truth, my husband and I were persons of “quite different construction, different bent, completely dissimilar views.” But we always remained ourselves, in no way echoing nor currying favor with one another, neither of us trying to meddle with the other’s soul, neither I with his psyche nor he with mine. And in this way my good husband and I, both of us, felt ourselves free in spirit” Anna Dostoyevsky 'A SIMPLE POETRY CONTEST' Sponsor: John Lawless Third Place

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Date: 3/31/2023 11:11:00 AM
Janis, congratulations on your win! You have penned a simple, elegant story of faith with such original images. Enjoyed! Sending you blessings of joy, especially for Easter.
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Janis Thompson
Date: 4/1/2023 10:02:00 AM
Thanks Sam. I am happy that you caught the feelings. Best wishes to you and continued favor. Janis
Date: 3/30/2023 10:12:00 PM
"How much I pride this wreath of gold, now vanquished in my war-torn soul" - Very beautiful lines. The entire poem is beautiful. Congratulations!
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Janis Thompson
Date: 4/1/2023 10:04:00 AM
Thanks for your lovely and supportive comments. You picked up the most important feelings. Continued blessings to you and yours, Love, Janis.
Date: 3/30/2023 8:47:00 PM
Very beautiful poetry, Janis, congratulations on your win and your marriage:)
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Janis Thompson
Date: 4/1/2023 10:05:00 AM
Thanks Joanne. The marriage is still a dream. Send up a prayer for me. Love and blessings, Janis.
Date: 3/30/2023 5:10:00 PM
Lovely, lovely poem Janis. Such flow and rhythm with wonderful rhyming! Congratulations on your win Janis! :)
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Janis Thompson
Date: 4/1/2023 10:07:00 AM
Thanks Linda. Blessings of favor to you and wishing much success in your writing. Love, Janis
Date: 3/30/2023 12:48:00 PM
Very nicely done Janis, the flow the rhyme, the passion. Thank you for participating in the contest
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Janis Thompson
Date: 4/1/2023 10:11:00 AM
John, I deeply appreciate and thank you for your valued placement of the poem. So many people are turned off by religious and ethnic subjects. Bless you for your open mind and kind poetic heart. It was a contest that allowed people to express themselves well. Praying God's continued blessings for you in this haphazard world. Love, Janis
Date: 3/20/2023 4:44:00 PM
Very well written, Janis. I think you are an exceptional poet. I have been reading your poems for years and am never disappointed. Be well sweet lady:)
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Janis Thompson
Date: 3/22/2023 8:48:00 AM
Thanks for your years of support and encouragement. Peace and blessings. Janis

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