Vicious

Hooded eyes that terrorize amid a face once recognized Mouth's a slit that grimly fits the evil words that spew from it Heart's so dark yet mind does hark to times there was a kinder spark Once delicious now malicious when did love turn so vicious?

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Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/4/2014 12:35:00 PM

Awesome work and a most touching question... I really like the third stanza. Great expression..."to times there was a kinder spark"....wishing you a most kind week ahead and lots of inspiration. Always, Laura

David Brown
Date: 10/4/2014 5:40:00 PM

Thank you so much for the very kind words Laura, much appreciated. I look forward to reading your poems

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/1/2014 9:51:00 AM

WOW WOW WOW WOW! Absolutely fabulous in a truthful hurtful way. Yes, I don't know how things get that way, Dave. You portrayed this truth so very well.

David Brown
Date: 10/1/2014 2:29:00 PM

Thank you as always Eileen, feedback from someone of your talents is a great reward.

Eve Roper

Date: 9/30/2014 11:07:00 PM

Good pen David, eve

David Brown
Date: 10/1/2014 2:28:00 PM

Thank you Eve, look forward to reading your work