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Vanilla Shell

morning daze - vanilla haze stabbed by crepuscular rays - a frisky prism seeking color, finding fauna fronds, a thousand greens and ... me vanilla, wondering how something so light can be born from something so dark - something so sweet from something so bitter? That vanilla shell which cloaked dawn now chased through the trees, weeping on leaves, yet it is not truly gone ... it sails by on a cloud and knits tomorrow's shawl...

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Susan Lawrence

Date: 9/25/2023 5:55:00 PM

Beautiful.. mysterious … sumptuous in its beckoning visuals ! I especially loved the last line … waiting for more . Loved the journey with you Craig ! Susan :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/16/2023 9:35:00 AM

Dear Craig, I'm swept away in the beauty of the intimate, unique artistry of your golden pen. The duality of your verse swirls and captivates my heart's imagination, spiraling up, spiraling down, breezing with your muse to the fantastic finale. Congratulations for your excellent win in Charlotte's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/16/2023 7:33:00 AM

I love how you've expressed so much feeling and imagery in so few words Craig. The ending stanza is beautifully spiritual. Congratulations! :)

Ink Empress

Date: 9/16/2023 7:23:00 AM

“And knits tomorrows shawl” what a creative ending. I really admire the imagery and alliterations and internal rhymes as well as how you’ve got readers too to ponder, about vanilla, in various forms. Beautiful flow and i must say sumptuous write that deserves all the accolades. Congratulations. Well deserved win

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/16/2023 4:41:00 AM

ah, this is beautiful..a shorter piece, but such an effective one, with every word perfectly placed; i love that closing image, very memorable..always quality writing from you - congrats on your win in my contest! :)

Craig Cornish
Date: 9/16/2023 6:44:00 AM

Always honored Charlotte! The poems you've inspired in this contest are worthy of any pen from any time...

Brian Sambourne

Date: 9/11/2023 9:55:00 AM

I really like the way you've taken "vanilla" - a morning mist haze, morphed then to yourself "wondering", + back to the "vanilla shell" of light + mist that "cloaked" the dawn. Excellent. Best of luck in the contest. Be well. Brian

Craig Cornish
Date: 9/11/2023 11:32:00 AM

Thanks Brian - your perceptions are spot on - love playing with dual concepts!