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Vacant House

(06/04/2013) I can feel something is watching me behind Its stare is freezing my spine I try to lift my foot, yet no movement shown I open my mouth and scream, not even a hush moaned It darkens the room, I can feel It’s not in any shape of real Is that a ghost? Or I just hate this place too much I feel worst? This abstract in a dark-shade-I- can’t-classify Reaching me and I can’t defy Sweeping the wall, it crawls Releasing its rage, it growls I still cannot move and I’m muted My friend pokes me waken to go in for my dare A vacant house that refuses to be disturbed I swear I wouldn't want to through the same nightmare

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/18/2013 1:57:00 AM

To answer your question I do like Eminem, actually. He has a quite very powerful lyrics, and unlike most rappers, you can tell right off the bat that he's the one rapping. Glad to meet another Linkin Park fan as well! I hardly listen to them anymore and have kinda got into more relaxing laid back music... but it's fun to reminisce! After they are the ones that inspired me in the first place, to start writing...

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/12/2013 4:13:00 AM

I think we've all had creepy, abandoned houses around the block, that simply are too eerie to dare stepping inside. Fear is a strange thing, and sometimes hard to tell if it's rational or irrational. Always use the buddy system, haha... good work!

Poet Tacito

Date: 4/9/2013 2:09:00 PM

Dark, yet wondrous. I am truly pleased with the tone of this piece. Strong & terrific job!

James Fraser

Date: 4/8/2013 3:22:00 PM

Like a scene from a scary movie Dinda. Full of suspense line to line, nice one - James :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/7/2013 12:38:00 PM

Dinda, your poem had me at grip, while you described and gave good imagery with feeling on the vacant house and eerie feeling that someone was watching you... gave me goosebumps. love the poem... . Enjoyed~ Thank you for sharing your poem. Have yourself a good one...Linda

David Williams

Date: 4/7/2013 7:25:00 AM

Dinda a scary write but well written...David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/6/2013 1:59:00 PM

A well written poem Dinda ..... hope it's a fantasy. - Have a nice weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Colleen Bono

Date: 4/6/2013 11:19:00 AM

I know that james wrote something for me.It was a long time ago.I told him to enter it in the contest and he got a well deserved 1st place.thank you.all my poems are from my thoughts.