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Unwanted Gaze

At a water slide a man eyed me He stared at a spot above my knee ‘Twas later I learned His gaze I had earned My swimsuit revealed a strange goatee *This really happened! Written April 25, 2015 for Jan’s contest.

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Pat Adams

Date: 1/18/2019 7:35:00 AM

This is so funny! A friend of mine told me one time she went to the bathroom in the mall, then walked around the food court 3 or 4 times deciding what to eat. It was cold when she sat down and she realized she had tucked her skirt into her panty hose!..........pat

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/18/2019 4:01:00 PM

It was embarrassing, Pat. At first, I thought he was staring at my legs. Then the gal with me noticed it and I rushed off to the loo. Thanks for reading an oldie!

Paul Callus

Date: 6/11/2018 11:21:00 AM

How could this have slipped my attention, Carolyn!! Thank you for a most hearty laugh:) Very belated congrats and hugs ~ paul

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 6/12/2018 4:28:00 PM

Life is filled with embarrassing moments...

Funom Makama

Date: 12/17/2015 3:48:00 AM

lines with curves of wisdom and landscapes of awe! My mind is in a park of joy to how I manage selecting this page. Keep on writing dear poet and as always, a wonderful 7 without a doubt!

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/30/2015 5:33:00 PM

Oh my my!

Joseph May

Date: 4/30/2015 10:42:00 AM

This was a good one Carolyn...Congrats on your win

Judy Konos

Date: 4/30/2015 9:23:00 AM

OMG! Terrific!

Nandita Das

Date: 4/30/2015 12:12:00 AM

Lol...Congratulations on your win.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/29/2015 11:15:00 PM

Good to see this one did so well, Carolyn. Congrats to you.

John Lawless

Date: 4/29/2015 10:44:00 PM

A neatly trimmed limerick Carolyn. Congrats on the win

Robert Johnson

Date: 4/29/2015 8:52:00 PM

Oh my is the comment of the day. :)

Kp Nunez

Date: 4/29/2015 7:37:00 PM

LOL! I laughed so hard at this! You're a limerick goddess! Congrats, Carolyn! Hugs! KIm :)

Eve Roper

Date: 4/29/2015 7:01:00 PM

Hahaha.... Funny! Congratulations on your wonderful win a 7:~)

Tim Smith

Date: 4/29/2015 5:38:00 PM

Oh my...lol congrats

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/29/2015 4:07:00 PM

Oh my! Too funny, Carolyn! Congratulations on your nice win. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

Date: 4/29/2015 3:51:00 PM

Congrats on your 1st place win Carolyn the fact this was a true story made it even funnier to me:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/28/2015 5:10:00 PM

hahaha. OH MY!!!!

Bl Devnath

Date: 4/28/2015 4:18:00 PM

Ha ha ha, it's a smiling funny poem. Enjoyed a lot. Good luck in the contest, my lovely friend. Loved always,bl

John Williams

Date: 4/27/2015 9:26:00 PM

Aren't you so clever Carolyn. A fantastic write. Like the man at the water slide, I will be looking for more. hahaha....kind regards---John from Australia

Joseph May

Date: 4/27/2015 4:42:00 PM

haha.....Very funny one Carolyn...hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/27/2015 1:22:00 PM

- This really happened !!!!! :)) - the best I've read ..........I wish you luck in the contest ...... hope the best will win - Nice to see you Carolyn, thanks for your visit and comments on my work - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

James Fraser

Date: 4/26/2015 3:36:00 PM

Oh my, no wonder he was staring, and I think most men would. Good luck in the contest, James :) :)

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 4/26/2015 8:14:00 PM

When my friend Sandra told me about the "goatee," I finally realized why he was staring. Yikes! I'll have to be more careful when I wear that swimsuit.