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Untouched Orchard Premiere Contest Winner

She's untouched fruit from forbidden orchards barren and wrinkled with fragmented twigs, whirling to the beat of melancholic musings of black-winged butterflies that croon and reflect the true tragedy of a queen waiting for the return of her king. Beneath splitting dusks, above wicked woodlands of weathered grim dreams, personified pomegranate seeds drip in sangria sins that feed her fears and lies from familiar chalices, but below the streams of poetic gardens, raspberry rivers taste sweeter than honeydew melons. Cosmos decipher her destiny designed for a silhouette emblazoned in tarnished trinkets, But there's nothing left In her shining throne that reflects in sorrow like a tombstone adorned with tilted tulips and wilted roses in a ruined wilderness. All that remains is a crown that lays amongst ebony and bones covered in cobwebs coated in memories and hurt. Her tears swiftly freeze into frost glazed lakes holding the last breeze of mourning dunes searching for a valley with his finest tune, but empty chambers below her feet echo with ghosts of his rhymes, as pantoums tangle in the paralyzed streaks of her golden hair. She sits in silence listening to the wind carrying wicked witches and mythological stones, Hearing the tale of beloved cities separated by unforgiving constellations. If eternity can be illustrated with calligraphic scriptures, this poetic saga will reveal immortal affections through metaphors that stretch beyond medieval manuscripts of an infinite infatuation.

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Date: 4/25/2024 8:59:00 AM
It's incredible how you personified this orchard. I even saw her as an entire valley. The sad queen of all she oversees. Congrats on this, your very first win that turned out to be huge!!
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Date: 4/25/2024 8:56:00 AM
So here is your very first trophy win, and from then until now, I count FIFTEEN trophies. Wow, Ink, I am lucky to even get three on one page of poetry. You have only three pages so far at poetrysoup. Let me read this first post of yours now.
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Date: 11/28/2023 8:57:00 AM
Congratulations on winning! Your piece is an evocative journey through vivid imagery and metaphor. Your symbolism, contrasting elements and consistent internal rhyming schemes create a harmonious and haunting melody in your exploration on the themes of loss and eternal love. Your piece is a testament to the enduring power of art. Well-deserved victory! Looking forward to reading more of your work.
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/28/2023 9:27:00 AM
Dear Jaymee, wow what a beautiful comment and what an honor to be placed as your first place winner. Im truly grateful for this recognition, the opening line of this poem was inspired by a personal prompt given by the silent one. So i just wanted to shout that out as i respond to you with nothing but gratitude. Thank you so very much. Appreciate your sincere thoughts and i hope to read more of your work too. Sending you light always
Date: 10/6/2023 2:19:00 AM
I thought of reading your first poem and got dizzy by the sweep of emotions expressed through an array of powerful metaphors that peek from every stanza. I visualize before me a queen waithing for the return of her king. There is the thrill of anticipation though "there's nothing left In her shining throne that reflects in sorrow like a tombstone adorned with tilted tulips and wilted roses in a ruined wilderness."and "her tears swiftly freeze into frost glazed lakes, holding the last breeze of mourning dunes"! An amazing creation of theatrical footage!
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Date: 9/8/2023 3:04:00 AM
Bam.. the sound of my mind exploding! That last stanza is dynamite, so incredibly rich and gorgeous this is poetry in 4D IMAX Technicolor.. love it.. "..this poetic saga will reveal immortal affections through metaphors.." All the feels.
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Date: 9/4/2023 7:40:00 PM
A Queen without her King devastating, she is graced and overcomes the cruel visions bestowed up on her. Her love sees her through. May the cosmos be not cold ones, a last goodbye. A beautiful tale, I.E.! I saw this today on Home Page!!
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Ink Empress
Date: 9/4/2023 9:50:00 PM
Oh that’s exciting, and thank you so much for reading and leaving your beautiful thoughts. I appreciate you
Date: 8/22/2023 3:57:00 PM
sounds like my kinda gal...you got cheer on women like that, she sounds like a warrior. Visions of ...Tennyson, dare I even suggest it. This one, I have read of yours, is the best.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:30:00 AM
Wow thank you for this beautiful comment truly i am in awe. And touched youve made me so very happpy thank you
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 8/22/2023 3:57:00 PM
"But in her web she still delights To weave the mirror's magic sights, For often thro' the silent nights A funeral, with plumes and lights And music, came from Camelot: Or when the moon was overhead Came two young lovers lately wed; 'I am half sick of shadows,' said The Lady of Shalott. And sometimes thro' the mirror blue The knights come riding two and two: She hath no loyal knight and true, The Lady of Shalott."
Date: 8/20/2023 2:31:00 PM
Dear Ink Empress, your poem of tragedy and loss is composed with a rich tapestry of dramatic imagery and emotive metaphors. A poetically expressive and beautifully impressive creation. Welcome to poetry soup! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:33:00 AM
Thank you so much truly for your warm wishes i am grateful to be here with talented poets like you.
Date: 8/20/2023 6:18:00 AM
This is a beautiful and expressive poem teeming with imagery, emotions and use of metaphor. I am in no doubt that you are a veteran writer with much talent. Welcome to Soup, albeit somewhat late; you bring along a breath of fresh air. ~ Regards // paul (this poem is a fav for me)
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/20/2023 7:55:00 AM
Thank you so very much for your very profound feedback truly grateful
Date: 8/17/2023 9:34:00 AM
Thanks for sharing this, and for sharing your talent while exposing your thoughts through your magnificent poetic style. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I welcome you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/26/2023 7:32:00 AM
Thank you kind soul for your visit and kindness. I appreciate your feedback and support so very much
Date: 8/17/2023 9:06:00 AM
A wonderful write, so many great phrases "her tears swiftly freeze into frost glazed lakes" I mean...gobsmacked I am. Welcome to the soup, I look forward to reading more of you.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/20/2023 7:56:00 AM
Thank you so very much i look forward to reading more of your work too
Date: 8/17/2023 7:44:00 AM
Exceptionally fine poetry. Definitely top class poetry. A fav for me, God bless you, my friend.
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Date: 8/16/2023 12:18:00 PM
The tragic twists and turns of love, loss, and the passage of time. “ All that remains is a crown that lays amongst ebony and bones covered in cobwebs coated in memories and hurt.” Ink Empress, we welcome you and your amazing poetry to Poetry Soup!
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/17/2023 1:31:00 AM
Thank you for feeling my words
Date: 8/16/2023 9:24:00 AM
Wow! Sensational poetry, welcome to PoetrySoup ink Express… Belle
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/17/2023 1:31:00 AM
Truly grateful thank you so much
Date: 8/16/2023 2:19:00 AM
Finally you have joined the soup.. Your poetry as always is always so deep and you use of vocabulary amazing. I am sure you poetry will be appreciated here, as you deserve that with your magnificent quill... The last stanza is just brilliant.. If eternity can be illustrated, an amazing line... love this one.
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/17/2023 1:31:00 AM
Awwn yes its a bit late i think should have joined earlier , so many brilliant poets here and wherever you are i must be there to cheer. Thank you for your kindness always
Date: 8/15/2023 10:58:00 AM
- A wonderful metaphorical poem, Ink Empress - Welcome to Poetry Soup :) -
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Date: 8/15/2023 6:45:00 AM
Thanks as well for your visit.
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Date: 8/15/2023 6:44:00 AM
It brought to mind the song Delta Dawn. A wonderful first offering to the soup. Welcome, I hope you enjoy your time here.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/15/2023 2:58:00 PM
"Delta Dawn what's that flower you have on? Could it be a faded rose from days gone by"?
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Ink Empress
Date: 8/15/2023 9:37:00 AM
Wow i must listen to the song thank you so much for your feedback
Date: 8/15/2023 6:26:00 AM
Inky!!!!!!! For me? I don't know what to say. A true soul in a fake, loveless world. A fave for me and you have your first follower
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/15/2023 6:27:00 AM
Btw, last stanza is poetry at its best!

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