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Untitled

Dark dull dawn
Sunset sad silhouette
After you’re gone

Pricking pain persists
Grief getting gross
You, still in dreams exist

Lonely long life
Sinking Spirit Subsists
Where, respite lies

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  1. Date: 11/22/2009 7:23:00 AM
    Sad write but well done Alliteration. Keep the pen flowing. Sara

  1. Date: 6/2/2009 5:05:00 PM
    Congrats Fatima on your "Untitled" alliteration being featured. Vince

  1. Date: 6/2/2009 2:58:00 PM
    Congratulations on your featured poem this week! Great write!

  1. Date: 6/1/2009 12:20:00 AM
    Congratulation on this lovely poem being featured this week. Ernilando

  1. Date: 5/20/2009 10:45:00 AM
    very beautiful.

  1. Date: 5/3/2009 11:48:00 AM
    Fatima, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul

  1. Date: 4/22/2009 11:18:00 AM
    Fatima, Congrats on your elegant poem having won the semi finals. Your poem is sunk in deep pathos which touches the heart. I wish you victory in the finals. - Mohammad I quote a Quatrain from my book Rubai'yat of Josh Malihabadi -A Drop and the Ocean printed in UK: Oserve every path and every turning try/ Understand all tricks and strategies buy/ Count the heart beat of desert and aura/ Feel every joint of the earth and sky.

  1. Date: 4/22/2009 10:02:00 AM
    Congratulations, Fatima on your writing being selected as a "first round survivor" ... smile ... and best of luck in the contest!

  1. Date: 4/10/2009 4:05:00 AM
    Congratulations on your poetry making it in the semi finals Fatima. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/5/2008 4:51:00 PM
    An awesome write Fatima! It wrenches the heart. What a deep love and what a sad picture! A well deserved feature this week. Heartiest congratulations. Keep up the good work. -Mohammad

  1. Date: 11/4/2008 6:18:00 PM
    A great job on this form of poetry! Well deserved to be featured! Congratulations! :) Carrie

  1. Date: 11/4/2008 6:55:00 AM
    Commendable job here Fatima! I confess this is what we all tend to feel after a sudden fall. Lovely use of alliteration. Congratulation on being featured. Love, Chitra

  1. Date: 11/3/2008 12:26:00 PM
    Nice use of alliteration to convey your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen

  1. Date: 11/3/2008 8:48:00 AM
    Congratulations Fatima on your wonderful poetry being featured this week. Love, Shar

  1. Date: 11/3/2008 4:24:00 AM
    Fatima - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week - God Bless

  1. Date: 11/3/2008 4:11:00 AM
    Congratulations on your well deserved poem being featured this week Fatima. Love, Carol

  1. Date: 11/2/2008 5:38:00 PM
    Congratulations Fatima on your "Untitled" Alliteration being featured. Vince