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Until Love, Do You Part

You were broken. A shattered animosity against booty calls and warm embraces. You weren’t good enough for that man who cleansed his addictions for the sake of your eyes, made of chocolate fantasies. Fishing for attention at Loneliness Lake, searching for more piranhas to gnaw on your D-cup breasts and size 10 curves. Until, out of the blue, you found another. He was twice your size with half of your vanity. A bottle of Windex to your brittle mirror. Now “Love” was declared in the time it takes to make popcorn. But, he never took a whiff of your bag. You started to hold hands and take low resolution cell phone pics to fog the memories, the proverbial paper bag over his face. As you ride upon his wanton extension, faking every gasp to get it over with. He would try to hold you, but your D-cups would interfere as your rolling eyes would leave his list of chores on the nightstand. As you hit the town, embracing arms of a stranger under black light’s costume. While “Love” wept. Now it’s anniversary day! An exchanging of gifts where written gratitude was sized smaller than the $20 McDonalds gift cards left in their blank envelopes. As ignorant friends gather to celebrate, more pictures are taken with celebrated couple placed 4 persons apart. Her chest wrapped by that stranger’s arms. As “Love” smiled in another direction. For it is his time to leave her list of chores, on top of her suitcase. © Drake J. Eszes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 8/15/2013 3:06:00 AM
This is awesome Drake,,,, love the words i've used the word piranhas in one of mine before. "not posted" I guess the dance of mine ran out of words. 17 yrs we were together. thing about break- ups is you have a lot of material to use, real or un-real ;} Cool it was featured ;}
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Date: 8/15/2013 6:04:00 AM
HA! Yes, a WHOLE LOT of material. Wow, 17 yrs. Thanks so much, Debbie.
Date: 8/12/2013 3:38:00 PM
wow, congrats I see this was one that was featured and it's getting lots of hits now. very interesting symbols in this one. Always your poems feel so current!
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Date: 8/15/2013 6:03:00 AM
Yes, I'm very grateful to have this featured. I wrote this quite a while ago too. :) Thank you so much, Andrea!
Date: 8/11/2013 11:19:00 AM
- Congratulations on having your poem featured on the homepage "Featured Poem of the Week" - Have a nice day, Drake. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/11/2013 11:24:00 PM
Thanks very much, Anne Lise. :)
Date: 8/11/2013 7:17:00 AM
Hello Drake, , '''CONGRATULATIONS''' On your featured poem of the week... Have yourself a nice and beautiful Sunday... -XOX- Love Linda
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Date: 8/11/2013 8:14:00 AM
Hey there, Linda. Thanks so much! =D You have a great rest of your weekend too!
Date: 8/8/2013 7:55:00 PM
Drake....WOW! I know this is tragic but almost made me smile too...the way you have a talent for wording things...I bet you can tell one heck of a ghost story!!!!! Congratulations on being featured this week...
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Date: 8/8/2013 10:01:00 PM
It made me smile too, in the end. ;-) Thank you so much, Donna!!!!!!!!!! =D Maybe I will do a ghost story one day.
Date: 8/5/2013 9:05:00 PM
A deep message. I don't think there's anyone here who can't relate to what you're saying. Congratulations on a well-deserved feature!...Milt
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Date: 8/5/2013 10:05:00 PM
Indeed, Milton! :) Nice to meet you & thank you so much!
Date: 8/5/2013 6:43:00 AM
this should be in a book on a shelve cause others would not put it down enjoyed the read congrats on being featured keep up the great writting
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Date: 8/5/2013 7:58:00 AM
That's SUPER kind of you to say, Katherine. Thank you so very much!
Date: 7/21/2013 2:00:00 PM
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Date: 7/17/2013 9:59:00 AM
Drake, Drake, Drake...this was beyond awesome...beyond! Wow! Yea...let her pack that suitcase and be gone...D cups and all! ;) Soup Mail
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Date: 7/17/2013 10:02:00 AM
=D Absolutely! HAHAHHA! Thanks so much, Eileen!
Date: 5/23/2013 12:02:00 AM
Perhaps I should call you the Metaphor King... the expressions of piranhas representing piggish men... the all too quick and easiness of making popcorn... something so quick couldn't be called true love, I would think. The expressions are all so original. Love your style, mate!
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Date: 5/23/2013 6:05:00 AM
That's VERY kind of you! Yes, I've met way too many lost souls declaring love so quickly. It's a bit of a pity, really. Many thanks to you, Tim! :)
Date: 9/28/2011 10:46:00 PM
Oh my, can't find words to say what I'd like to but just know how unique you are as you express the esoteric ideas I need to read. So special Drake.
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Date: 10/9/2011 7:57:00 AM
That's terribly sweet of you to say. Thank you so much, Elizabeth. :)
Date: 4/25/2011 5:38:00 AM
Thank you very kindly Linda-Marie! Very appreciative for that.
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Date: 4/24/2011 11:42:00 AM
Hope I can replicate as lovely Drake ..going to post my entry for your new contest...luv.. wishing u a most blessed Happy Easter Sunday my friend.. your words are a delight to read ..always..
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Date: 4/18/2011 5:31:00 AM
It is quite sad actually. But, it ultimately becomes a win when we absorb in our hearts what we take from it and do all we can to better ourselves the next time around. Thank you Wilma!!! :)
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Date: 4/12/2011 12:43:00 PM
Another one, spot on you have a unique way of bringing your thoughts across which captivate the reader. Thank you for always dropping in on my side.. I unearth another gem from you, just so sad that many relationships end up this way.. Glad to see from the comments that it is not a personal write ;) tc
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Date: 4/5/2011 10:30:00 AM
Hey C.L.! Yes, I tend to believe many are gluttons for that sort of punishment. Maybe just for the sheer thrill of it all perhaps? I hope things improve further for you. Truly. Thank you!
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Date: 3/23/2011 6:12:00 AM
Hi Jenn! Thank you so much! :)
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Date: 3/21/2011 9:35:00 AM
very interesting write, enjoyed reading :)
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Date: 3/18/2011 10:27:00 PM
Carolyn, no it wasn't. Thankfully. But it did involve somebody personally. It just didn't happen to me. Just something I noticed. Thank you! :) Stephen, hey man. I miss the whole package, honestly. But, it was her claims of being "broken" that was such a massive turn-off. Probably did it on purpose to make it easier to not like her. She failed miserably. Thanks so much!
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Date: 3/18/2011 7:47:00 PM
I can tell you miss those cups, but hated her attention to detail! Unrequited love is a cankering mold that grows from day to day. I think that this type of poetry is cathartic and therapeutic! I have written a few poems on this subject, and I can tell you my exhaust pipe was emptied.
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Date: 2/19/2011 3:55:00 PM
He's really better off without a woman whose affections turn faster than the time it takes to make popcorn. Love the injection of humor -- imagined him trying to hold her in his arms while the D cups made it difficult. Love lost and unreturned affection can be devastating, Drake. Hope this is not based on personal experience. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/7/2011 8:01:00 AM
Linda my dear, thank you so much for that. I wanted to make sure that, even though there was pain in this piece, there was going to be something more valuable waiting. The trigger for this was a pic of somebody I knew that looked kinda suspect. Writing this was a lot of fun.
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Date: 2/5/2011 7:14:00 AM
Intensely dramatic lines u have creatively penned Drake... a synopsis of luv gone wrong but luv waiting in the wings to make it better.. enjoyed this adventure in words my friend with luv..
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Date: 1/31/2011 8:49:00 PM
Hey John! Thank you for your 2 cents on this. Really appreciate you comin' by here to read this.
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Date: 1/31/2011 2:30:00 PM
the title was so meaningful for this tragic piece of where our lives went wrong. the birth of a hatred equaling that of love has it's birth and will probably end up deader than a door nob. any way that my oppinion of how love is suppose to be. jhl
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