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Unnumbered Haiku Coloured In Red

scrubbing with her hands red stains from the priest's collar - strawberry picking choosing wallpaper - the red-breasted cardinals in my shopping bag Last night of harvest - reflection of red blood moon in his empty glass red cherry blossoms before next winter follows -his last picnic morn soft vermillion wings flutter on her bare shoulder - the first glimpse of Spring Its vermillion wings perching between rose petals sips of ambrosia scarlet wings flutter upon a dry corolla unsweetened nectar Inspired by Silent One 's haiku /senryu 5//7/5 syllables using the colour red - not for the contest

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Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 3/29/2016 12:34:00 PM

Amazing haiku, Charm.

Red Fiery

Date: 3/19/2016 10:42:00 PM

Dear Charmainr, all these red colored haikus are brilliantly painted by you... My fav one is sips of ambrosia..really amazing..!!!! 7/7 Hugs Red

Bipul Banerjee

Date: 3/15/2016 12:43:00 PM

nectar words, lovely !!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2016 10:33:00 PM

wowowow, these are amazing. My very favorites were the wall paper one and the vermillion wings on her bare shoulder. you are a wonder with KU!!

Casarah Nance

Date: 3/11/2016 5:10:00 PM

Really red good! Enjoyed this!

Jan Allison

Date: 3/11/2016 11:59:00 AM

such a stunning string of haiku Charma:-) hugs Jan xx7

Bipul Banerjee

Date: 3/10/2016 2:37:00 AM

fantastic

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/9/2016 8:22:00 AM

so vibrant are your 'kus, charms... should be in the contest; you delight!.. huggs

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/8/2016 11:01:00 PM

Great Haiku's, loved the first one! Had to think there for a sec!

Paul Callus

Date: 3/7/2016 4:54:00 PM

An excellent string of haiku, Charmaine. I have been reading a lot about haiku/senryu lately and yours go very much by the rules...especially 'no spoon feeding'. Debbie's love for haiku has influenced me! ~ Regards // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/5/2016 11:09:00 PM

Excellent haiku, Charmaine. You know how to give the "a-ha moment" in each of them, as well as give the sense of "lightness", that for me, is a must for haiku. I'm really digging the "wallpaper" one and the "first glimpse of spring", for its easy-going language ... your muse took you to some wonderful places.

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/7/2016 10:04:00 AM

Re a glimpse of Spring... The bare shoulde r ..shows its not a cold weather..and the wings represent a butterfly.Butteeflies and flower gives me the feeling..Spring has begun .Tnks for yr interest B-)

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/7/2016 10:00:00 AM

The wall paper one and the robins connection... I could see the red in that red robins`print wall paper. Silent One asked for use of red colour and I thought of shoppng at Xmas..So the season was December..Coulfnt help thinking of that red breasted robins n te wall..I didnt buy that kind of wall paper..but ..yeah we are. in the time of buying wall paint ir wall paper and red is a colour i always wanted.

Anthony Mark

Date: 3/4/2016 8:34:00 PM

Very very good Haiku's, each with its own poignancy, love the second last one, feels like a personal " come and sip me" challenge, make wine taste wine ...very sensuous ....mark

Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 3/4/2016 7:49:00 PM

Lovely collection.

Red Barchettadrive

Date: 3/3/2016 5:23:00 PM

The 3rd being my favorite, yet I read all as a colorful journey!

Tim Smith

Date: 3/3/2016 2:51:00 PM

Your muse is working overdrive today....love them

Tim Smith

Date: 3/3/2016 10:59:00 AM

Warm campfire ambers spark...shedding light on blushing cheeks. ..moonlit thoughts are read

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 4:25:00 PM

Thanks... Yep guess the message (the cycle of cherry blossoms which wither quickly, and the cycle of a man which ends by death, or a friendship by loss ) , yes thanks Tim.

Tim Smith
Date: 3/3/2016 3:33:00 PM

I have a lot to learn as well. I was happy to help, if I did...goodnight Charma

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 3:29:00 PM

I still have a lot to learn about haiku but the gracegutssite by haiku tutor Michael Dylan Welsch helps a lot..Along wth Deborah's haiku group..found lots of help there ,and my first helper Ruben. Seven years of learning..Still more to learn. Tnks for your input..Goodnight.

Tim Smith
Date: 3/3/2016 3:09:00 PM

I do like it the way it reads. It does transcend those feelings. : )

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 3:05:00 PM

Read cherry blossoms /before early winte r's.rouch / his last picnic morn. I dont think touch is needed. I cant see sense in the haiku this way.I wanted to transmit the feeling im feeling cherry blossoms in autumn ..And last picnic of autumn neath the cherry blossom before its petals wither /die ..the cycle of the blossom ends.The man,its his last picnic,winters follow(death)..his life cycle ends..The symbolism of the cherry blossom and life.I like it how it is now..tnks

Tim Smith
Date: 3/3/2016 2:46:00 PM

early winters touch? or ??? ....I see many new ones

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 2:40:00 PM

before next winter ? new winter follows? ? Dont want to add adjectives like cold ..etc.. Evetyone knows winter is cold

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 2:38:00 PM

adjective such as ? Remember I want to show but dont want to tell..I hate spoon feeding in haiku

Tim Smith
Date: 3/3/2016 1:09:00 PM

I'm thinking using an adjective before "winters" and getting rid of "to"

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 12:57:00 PM

I changed my last, still my least fave : (

Tim Smith

Date: 3/3/2016 10:52:00 AM

These are great...I almost fell out of my chair with the priest's collar : )...on the last one do you think if your changed morn to mourn it would give it more depth ?...oooh I have one rattling in my mind : )

Tim Smith
Date: 3/3/2016 11:12:00 AM

mourning the end of a friendship...but I like it the way it is.

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2016 11:06:00 AM

I do have one published about cherryblossoms and the death of a child somewhere..And I was thinking of someithing like Red cherry blossoms /before last breaths to follow ( or winters to follow as a second line..but I cant see last picnic and the n ..mourn..I was thinking last picnic to connnect with the shiort lived friendships.I cant see a picnic mourm..Does it mean someone dying on a picnic.? And its showing too much then : )..Tnks for reading :.)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/3/2016 10:15:00 AM

Thanks Mirahh..Thanks so much,and the ruby reply was for Silent One..Sorry my replies arr doing kanga jumps..grrr: )