Unlocking the Answers

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For Dilly Dally's unlocking the answers contest

In the beginning quasars burst forth, primal stars born Ionised light suffused, a cosmic primeval dawn Later man came along, looked west, awestruck by the sun One morn an eclipse came to pass, blotting out his sun Man huddled together, fear of the unknown was born They surmised god was in the sky, controlling the dawn Intelligence was naive, as sense was yet to dawn Eons passed, man grew quite clever, unlocking the sun Now splits atoms in labs, with AI primed to be born We had no choice but to be born, wake up one dawn, feel god and the sun

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/17/2023 2:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your name being on the winners' list. Way to go. Sara K

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/15/2023 8:27:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a write/story. Love your line, "Now splits atoms in labs, with AI primed to be born." Many say the AI is a very bad things. Guess only time will tell. Have a blessed day writing away...........

Di11y Da11y

Date: 11/14/2023 11:06:00 AM

Ooh look at all that glowing praise for me in that thread below - good job I marked blind or I'd have been legging it over to Ireland with your rosette in person :) an exciting, explosive tritina that stands alone in its uniqueness - congratulations on your placement

I Am Anaya

Date: 10/27/2023 10:02:00 AM

Truth in your compilation of man, the poetry is sweet. I do see those three words used often in your poems. B0l in DD's contest. I take it back I think this is brilliant for the contest! xhugs

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/27/2023 12:30:00 PM

She certainly is clever, every poem she writes has deeper meaning, she taps into the very fabric of reality without realising it sometimes, give this one a try if you find the time!

I Am Anaya
Date: 10/27/2023 11:24:00 AM

DD is creative with her contests, she's so clever. A revelation by the end of the poem, interesting form alright, glad it doesn't have to rhyme. I wanted to try it.

David Kavanagh
Date: 10/27/2023 10:40:00 AM

I use them quite a lot Anaya, alongside a few others I mentioned in the poem, not familiar with this form, found it tough, cheers David