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Unglued

At times coming unglued delaminated Strands separating vaguely holding their shape I breathe in the breath of delirious spirits swimming in circles around a splintered mind I reach oblivions doorstep cross the threshold no bride in hand yellowed fabric clinging to palms I look out empty windows reflecting the light of expended stars I dream colored memories in spurts of black and white draped over yesterdays celebrations candles burnt at both ends cakes with no surprises Medals long tarnished glitters that were never gold Looking at darkened perspectives lit in the corners of my mind wishing I could understand the point blocks used to build knock down buildings is anything made to last what truly exists beyond a cybernetic world keyboards stretched along distant desks searching for answers revealed stroke by stroke interconnecting the unconnectable masses Minds intertwined grasping at times coming unglued I had another poet Marquis ask me to critique one of his poems and I suggested that if a line in the poem was not worthy of writing another poem he should consider taking it out. as a result I took a line from the poem I wrote for Drake and gave it a try, this is the result. My other poem was titled "Contorshinist's Test"

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Date: 8/11/2013 6:07:00 AM
I love the way your words travel about and weave back into themselves in this poem. Well done
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/11/2013 7:14:00 AM
Thanks Monterey, I often have no idea where my words will take me.
Date: 8/3/2013 7:35:00 AM
Rick, I love your journey of tangled words, truly entrancing, it has a dreamy, haunting quality to it, well done, Constance
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/3/2013 8:14:00 AM
Thanks Constance, I had fun writing this one.
Date: 8/3/2013 12:02:00 AM
Thanks,losing the internet isn't why I left that comment. LONG story. Love always,Colleen
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/3/2013 6:12:00 AM
Soup mail me.
Date: 8/2/2013 11:35:00 PM
I found this poem a very rewarding read. You surely tangled my mind with this one--in a good way! Really cool. Always, Laura
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/3/2013 6:11:00 AM
Thanks Laura, cool avatar.
Date: 8/2/2013 3:06:00 PM
I breathe in the breath of delirious spirits swimming in circles around a splintered mind......How did you get into my head and catch the essence of how I've been feeling lately? ;) These two lines define my connection to this piece...Interesting write....very different from your usual work.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/2/2013 11:08:00 PM
Yes....but....just promise you won't change too much. I like the magic of who you are right now as seen in your work! :) #justsaying
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/2/2013 3:14:00 PM
I don't want to be to predictable. *lol* I never know what will come out of my head.
Date: 8/2/2013 2:55:00 PM
Yeah Rick, what Drake said LOL!!! Man I can't sum it up any better than he did. Wow, to just write this the way you did is phenomenal! I love the line "blocks used to build knock down buildings" that was great. And I see what you meant now about each line standing on its own if necessary. Never really considered that. Now I'll have to re-evaluate all my work, but this is what I meant by the hard truth -from here I can improve. Simply put, great piece Rick, and great way to sum it up Drake! MC
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/2/2013 3:16:00 PM
What a great comment! Thanks Marquis, you are welcome back any time. ;0)
Date: 8/2/2013 2:38:00 PM
I needed these potent lines to simmer in my smile. The premise of this piece hits a plateau in my heart that few reach with me. In no uncertain terms, will I call this poem anything less than epic. This will be a favorite. This is the end result of truly being "open minded". Not just saying "hey, cool piece" or "I don't get your poem". But, by mentally putting yourself in the writer's shoes to take the time & GRASP what they write. That is what it really means. Unglued, free, genuine...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/2/2013 3:18:00 PM
Thanks Drake this will go down in my mental book of Favorite comments. You have made my day Drake, so glad you enjoyed.
Date: 8/2/2013 2:27:00 PM
Wonderful work on this piece! I enjoyed reading your poetry. Laura :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/2/2013 3:18:00 PM
Thanks Laura ;0)

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