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Whispered dreams on gentle breezes … taken by a wild and wayward wind Songs of yen ‘neath shade of branches …engulfed by tears of weeping willow wishes made on sea’s white horses …washed away amid the rolling waves *** was intended for Adeleke's Sky, Soil and Sea contest, I took too long but here's my effort anyway ;)

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Kris Walters

Date: 8/3/2010 8:23:00 AM

I'm not familiar with this form (something for me to check out :D ) but this is just gorgeous. I love your writing too, its so wonderful to be able to read lovely poets like you! Hugs, Kris

James Fraser

Date: 7/24/2010 1:31:00 PM

What a joy to read this Saturday evening, it's simply beautiful Sharon >> James

Gert W. Knop

Date: 7/24/2010 7:48:00 AM

Lovely written poem and a real pity that you've missed Adeleke's contest, Sharon! Enjoyed truely the read this afternoon. And thank you for your kind comments!...Have a nice Sunday!...Gert:)

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 7/24/2010 3:35:00 AM

Its a pity it wasn't entered in the contest,it could have been the winner,I love the whispered dreams on gentle breezes,and the wishes made on sea white horses,beautiful! (and re your comment on my 'Velvet petals'I understand you,it happens to me so many times whilst reading others verses,I picture myself there so easily,At the moment I'm wishing on a sea's white horse,lovely! :) C.C

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/23/2010 6:37:00 PM

A very creative enjoyed. Sorry you missed the contest.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/23/2010 2:48:00 PM

Excellent descriptive poem that was trully enjoyed by me...Sara

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/23/2010 1:19:00 PM

You would have been a winner with this......it is too beautiful....(sea's white horses!! great line!!!!d) So sorry you missed the deadline! ps...that first line reminded me of a very old song (Wayward Wind) ......from long long ago!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/23/2010 12:31:00 PM

oh, my gosh, Sharon, it happened again. you were on my same "wave" length with your writing. Go check out my crystalline I did. I used very similar items to yours!! with the wind and the rolling waves, etc!! This would have done so well I think. Probably would have beat me out for sure, if I were to get on the list! LUv,Andrea

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/23/2010 11:48:00 AM

Lovely words Sharon.. sorry u missed Adeleke's contest as his seem to close quickly.. but save it for a rainy day.. these contest recycles lots of times... enjoyed your beautiful sentiments.. with luv..