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Unforgettable Moment

Those were my green and salad days, a time of innocence and play, where marbles shone like pearls and every trinket was a treasure. The world was simple, a canvas of pure joy school, home, and the familiar corners of my aunt's house were the boundaries of my kingdom. I was a prince, carefree and unburdened, unaware of the complexities that lay beyond. My father, the silent architect of my happiness, waged wars against invisible foes, his struggles hidden behind a veil of stoicism. I floated through those days, buoyed by blissful ignorance, until a stark awakening came. It was etched into my memory, a moment as indelible as an inscription on copper the day he sold his wedding watch to pay for my education. For the first time, I felt the sting of tears for another's sacrifice. It was a profound shift, a departure from the self-centred orbit of childhood. Emotions painted the moment in vivid hues, a portrait of empathy and maturity emerging from the canvas of my youth. For a poetry contest, inspired by a memory. ©15/09/2014

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Date: 5/26/2015 4:40:00 PM
Enjoyed Malik. Hope you had a wonderful Memorial Day filled with pride and togetherness. love ~SKAT!~
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Date: 4/2/2015 8:03:00 PM
Malik, Thank you for the sweet reply to my comment. Love LINDA
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Date: 9/25/2014 11:36:00 PM
What a memory...!:) indeed parents will do anything for their children..:)
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/26/2014 3:39:00 AM
many many thanks dear friend, you are so kind... God bless you dear Friend Always,,, Malik
Date: 9/25/2014 4:55:00 AM
nice job thanks for sharing it with me
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/25/2014 5:02:00 AM
Thanks for your visit
Date: 9/23/2014 4:57:00 PM
nice win...PD
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/23/2014 11:26:00 PM
thanks for your visit,,, Malik
Date: 9/22/2014 5:11:00 PM
wonderful heartfelt write so full of memories and emotions:-) Hugs jan xxx
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/22/2014 11:19:00 PM
Many many thanks Jan, you are really a great poet with a kind heart.. your comments are always welcome. God bless
Date: 9/21/2014 8:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your well earned win about this deep and touching memory.
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/21/2014 11:34:00 PM
many many thanks for your visit and the comments
Date: 9/20/2014 12:54:00 AM
Congrats on your win, indeed this is a treasure memory and also profound, I got the feel :) thank you for visiting my page before, have a nice day, hug, yanny
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/20/2014 1:02:00 AM
thanks yanny for your visit.
Date: 9/19/2014 9:49:00 PM
Congrats on your win. Yours was one of my favorites of the memories.
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/20/2014 12:21:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, I always like your poems..... Stay blessed Dear.. Malik
Date: 9/19/2014 5:08:00 PM
Very emotional memory. I am sure there were many other days like this kept secret from you. Beautiful sacrifice of your parents. Congratulations on your win
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/20/2014 12:20:00 AM
Thanks Brenda for stopping by and a nice comment, yeah definitely there are always many other that we never come to know,I think each one among us has same memories... Thanks again God Bless,,,,, Malik
Date: 9/19/2014 9:49:00 AM
A very strong write and a fine memory of a father's sacrifice for his son! Giving this one a super 7 rating and adding this to my fav list too. For it reminds me of my own father's sacrifices for each of his 11 children. BBravooooooo!!!!!
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/20/2014 12:16:00 AM
Many many thanks Mr. Robert for reading my poem and a seven rating. it is your greatness that you consider my poem as one of your favourites and i feel that i have done a good job when my poetry remind someone, something.. it really feels great.. God bless you..
Date: 9/19/2014 5:57:00 AM
Nice memory recalled with emotion, congrats, Malik
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/19/2014 6:45:00 AM
Many many thanks Dr. Mehta for encouraging me, it is really not less than an award that people like you appreciate my work.. God bless you.
Date: 9/19/2014 12:52:00 AM
Excellent write! Could feel the emotion.
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/19/2014 1:54:00 AM
thanks Palli for stopping by.
Date: 9/18/2014 6:40:00 AM
I'll remember this poem I think, it conveys very well that what you so strongly felt. Beautiful Malik!!!Thanks for appreciating my poem... smiles
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/18/2014 7:08:00 AM
Thanks for stopping by, for reading and liking my poem and for your kind words. stay blessed.. Malik
Date: 9/17/2014 6:42:00 PM
very beautifully penned piece malik
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/17/2014 11:00:00 PM
thanks a lot Liam... god bless
Date: 9/17/2014 12:59:00 PM
nicely done Malik, a fine piece, take care, Gordon
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/17/2014 10:59:00 PM
Thanks Gordon for your time..
Date: 9/16/2014 11:22:00 PM
I like the style of your writing, Malik Yaseen.
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/16/2014 11:29:00 PM
Thanks JAKE, for liking and reading my poem... Stay blessed..
Date: 9/16/2014 9:15:00 AM
Well done Malik....Tricia ....good luck:)
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/16/2014 10:51:00 PM
Thanks Tricia for your time.
Date: 9/16/2014 7:56:00 AM
Unique and creative work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/16/2014 8:01:00 AM
Thanks a lot Sara for your compliment. God bless you
Date: 9/16/2014 6:49:00 AM
- A really great poem - very well written !!! - Take care of your unforgettable moment,Malik ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/16/2014 6:51:00 AM
Thanks Anne for your time, and for the kind words.... Have a nice time. :) Malik
Date: 9/16/2014 3:47:00 AM
Wow an impressive poem on utopia and carefree phases of life. I enjoyd reading the lines. Pls do review my latest poem too.
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/16/2014 4:32:00 AM
Thanks Zaynub for reading me and for liking my poem.. For sure i will check your posts... Malik
Date: 9/16/2014 12:01:00 AM
Nice Malik... Rated and enjoyed... Verlena
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/16/2014 12:07:00 AM
Thanks Dear Verlena for stopping by and reading my poem... Stay blessed
Date: 9/15/2014 10:43:00 PM
wow, that is quite a memory and I really love how you put it into the context of what was happening in your life. it shows a very sensitive person! good poem.
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/15/2014 11:44:00 PM
Thanks Andrea for stopping by and giving time to read me, and many thanks for your love and nicest comment. Stay blessed
Date: 9/15/2014 11:04:00 AM
Beautiful lines Yaseen. I really liked the most striking lines, Those were my green and salad days, My friends, my toys were all my wealth.' My good wishes for you and for your family members, who are in Jammu and Kashmir. Will be visiting your other poems soon. Love and best wishes ...Ravindra K Kapoor
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Ma Yaseen
Date: 9/15/2014 11:43:00 PM
Many many thanks Mr Ravindra for your visit and your kind and affectionate words. You are kind, rich from heart. God bless you.. Malik

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