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Unfinished -

As the hands of time tick away, the golden days become nights, leaves turn saffron, and I see the stars flickering light vanishes - the dream to be with you has moved too far. Yet, my love is alive, rich, and ardent as ever as when you and I first found each other’s soul united that one night the silky green leaf still clings to the tree. Is it just remembrance when the leaf sways with the wind as it hangs from the strong tree - Is it just a shining star's memory I am feeling this fervent teeming flame. -maria 10.21.14

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2014 12:51:00 AM

wow, this is so like my own feelings for someone in the past and many of my poems have this same theme. I LOVE this one, hija!!!

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/29/2014 7:41:00 AM

oh that's so nice, Andrea! nice to share the very same feelings with you through this piece. am so glad you loved it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/29/2014 12:51:00 AM

a seven!

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/29/2014 7:42:00 AM

feels so wonderful to be rated highly by you, Andrea!

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/28/2014 5:20:00 PM

I love this, you are a great poet. I am going to fav this add it to my collection.

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/29/2014 7:36:00 AM

oh that's sweet, Maurice. that warms my heart :))

Jan Allison

Date: 10/23/2014 10:55:00 AM

Hija this is simply beautiful i do love the form I have never seen it before:-) Hugs jan xxx

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/25/2014 7:12:00 AM

thank, Jan! hugs!

James Fraser

Date: 10/22/2014 3:17:00 PM

Looking forward to the finished article, and based on what I've read already, it'll be worth it - Hija, James :)

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/23/2014 10:36:00 AM

added some lines, but it really is unfinished i guess. thanks, James for the kind words :)

Tim Smith

Date: 10/21/2014 12:57:00 PM

I love what I see so far...let me know when you are done....hugs Tim

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/23/2014 10:37:00 AM

think this will really be an unfinished piece

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/21/2014 4:33:00 PM

thanks, Tim! i will try to spill more if i can :)) you and Jan are darlings of this page..painting a smiling sun to my day..hugs back

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2014 12:58:00 PM

people will talk Tim we are commenting at the same time again! Hugs jan xxx

Jan Allison

Date: 10/21/2014 12:57:00 PM

Oh Hija finish this it is beautiful:-) Hugs jan xxx

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/23/2014 10:40:00 AM

Jan, added some lines but seems i could not put closure to it. it is unfinished..thanks for the push :))

Hija De La Luna
Date: 10/21/2014 4:29:00 PM

thanks, Jan! let's see :)) hugs back! you two are sweet :)) made me smile

Jan Allison
Date: 10/21/2014 1:06:00 PM

lol - Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith
Date: 10/21/2014 1:04:00 PM

They already are..They are saying there go those two cuckoo birds...stand clear...hugs Tim