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Unexplainable

If dependence was darkness And reason was feel Then touch would be euphoric  With hearts made from steel  Closeness was sorrow  As time is defence  Microns of seconds  As chimes is  last a lifetime Defenceless as I utter the words  Speechless as I receive them  Kindness of a grape  Memory's never upset the blood pumper You've no reason to pay me back I owe you zilch and u owe me jack We will be six foot under one day  Even then we will be 3 feet apart

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 11/12/2012 3:06:00 PM
this is very well done, your timing is perfect. the only thing i have to say other wise is to maybe rethink the last word of stanza two. it just seems a bit off. but other wise you have a hit
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Date: 10/17/2012 2:13:00 PM
Hi Cecil I like this, welcome. :-)
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Cecil Sydney Hurt
Date: 10/17/2012 5:20:00 PM
Many thanks
Date: 10/17/2012 8:25:00 AM
That ending hit hard. Very well done!
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Cecil Sydney Hurt
Date: 10/17/2012 5:20:00 PM
Many thanks sir

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