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Under the Skylight

Rehearsing through a starless night Tangled limbs among silky threads Silver heat of comet's flight Blushing pink of dawn's sky
_________________ For Nette's Contest "The Passion of a Jue Ju" 7/27/14 By Carrie Richards __________________________________________

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 8/5/2014 6:24:00 PM
Very well done! grats on your win!
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Date: 8/4/2014 8:50:00 PM
Big congrats on this fine piece. Congrats on your win!!
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Date: 8/4/2014 7:09:00 PM
I love how original and descriptive yours is Carrie...congrats
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Date: 8/4/2014 6:46:00 PM
Congrats on the win Carrie, well done.
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Date: 8/4/2014 4:32:00 PM
Awesome descriptions in your write, Carrie. Congratulations. Glad to get to see this one at last.
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Date: 8/4/2014 10:06:00 AM
congrats for your Jue ju write and win, Carrie.
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Date: 8/4/2014 10:00:00 AM
I am glad to see that most of us agree on imagery playing a main part in this lovely write. Congrats on yet another win, Carrie. // paul
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Date: 8/4/2014 7:44:00 AM
Impressive imagery and well crafted piece, carrie. Congrats
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Date: 8/4/2014 7:13:00 AM
Wow great one Carrie ! Congrats on great win!
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Date: 8/4/2014 4:46:00 AM
Passionate winning Jeu Ju ..Way to go..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/4/2014 3:14:00 AM
Carrie the image in this is very good and it would turn into an extremely good tanka with slight adjustment, it deserves more views....David
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Carrie Richards
Date: 8/4/2014 9:49:00 AM
Thank you Dave, for the comment, and the great idea! I'll try giving this poem a tweak. I hadn't thought of that, but it would give a little more flow to the idea..... I'm so appreciative of your continued support!! :)
Date: 8/3/2014 12:29:00 PM
Oh Carrie can't believe I am first to comment- fabulous imagery congrats on your win
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