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Uncle Mel

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Uncle Mel

The clock ticked at nine in the evening of July
When I lay on the bed in the silence of the night
Trying to fall asleep but something's bothering
A feeling interfered and started shivering

My eyes were almost closed when I heard a noise
Slowly getting louder; what a frightening voice?
It's knocking on my door like there's something wrong
Breathing stopped; heartbeats like never before

I paused in indecision while holding the door knob
From the window the wind blows; atmosphere's intense
As I opened the door, I almost killed a man
Uncle Mel is on the house; a blushed of surprise

He asked if Dad's around and seemed a need inside
I wondered that he looked liked exhausted and too tired
Yet, I answered him in an awkward style
Then he left me with a feeling of strange and fright

I went back on my bed feeling weird and crazy
I have just made a ghost; an illusion of fear
I let it out of me since nightmares are greedy
The more we think of terror, the more it eats our dream

The morning waved hello; everything's fine
I got off my bed to start the day right
Then I saw my Mom packing and dealing with some stuffs
She's crying and leaving to town

Questions I'd asked to know what's going on
At the tip of her tongue but to utter's arduos
I calmed her down and her story has begun
About an innocent man who died the night I got wild

It was an evening in July, nine on a dot
When the man got stabbed stopping a fight
Calling my dad's name; looking for help
Dead on the spot and found no aid

Goosebumps all over when I heard the news
It's Uncle Mel who passed away and visited my room
Never knew all the reasons behind the apparition
One thing's for sure, He's soul still calls


#Everything Holloween
Created: October 18, 2013



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  1. Date: 11/11/2013 6:37:00 PM
    A very interesting story! I enjoyed it very much! Great work, Arden! Congratulations on your win!...This poem reminded me of two of mine, "Ghost" and "You Know Something Is There"...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. I appreciate it very much!

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 11/13/2013 1:56:00 PM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Wow! Your words are delight to my heart! Thanks, Kelly!Your welcome! Be safe! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
  1. Date: 11/11/2013 12:20:00 AM
    Congrats on the win. Glad you could turn the experience into a poetic story :)

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 11/11/2013 7:54:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you, Karen! That's encouraging! That's an experience of a lifetime. Worth-recorded! Bless you my friend! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
  1. Date: 11/10/2013 5:32:00 PM
    enjoyed this write from your pen, whether based on truth or fiction you penned the story well...congrats on your win :)

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 11/11/2013 7:52:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Sandra! Appreciate that! This was based on my personal experience. Nostalgic and worth-writing for me. Thanks for taking time reading my long entry. Take care my friend. Love,love,love! :-) - Den
  1. Date: 11/10/2013 12:50:00 AM
    Congrats on the win, Arden

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 11/10/2013 4:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thanks, Dr. Mehta! All the best my friend! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
  1. Date: 11/9/2013 6:39:00 PM
    wow, is this true?? An amazing and sad story. Congrats for the win with this spooky tale.

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 11/10/2013 4:10:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Yes, Andrea! This is so true! This was my experience back in my teenage years. Had a lot of stories like this one in the past! Sixth-sense was active back then. Bless you my friend! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
  1. Date: 11/9/2013 5:14:00 PM
    Arden, Congratulations on your awesome Halloween win. Love ~ SKAT~

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 11/10/2013 4:13:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Wow! Thanks a lot SKAT for choosing this piece as one of your winners! Happy that you liked it! More power to you and to your future contests. Love,love,love! :-) - Den
  1. Date: 10/20/2013 3:21:00 AM
    Spooky but very touching.

    Gopela Avatar Arden Gopela
    Date: 10/20/2013 4:38:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Can't forget the feeling whenever the memory injects! Sixth sense no more! Happy Holloween, Jake! Love,love,love! :-)
  1. Date: 10/18/2013 1:42:00 PM
    This is my Holloween treat for you guys and for all the soupers. It's a true story that I had experienced in the past! Can't forget the spooky feeling! Hope you like it! Love, love, love! :-)