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Uncle Mel

The clock ticked at nine in the evening of July When I lay on the bed in the silence of the night Trying to fall asleep but something's bothering A feeling interfered and started shivering My eyes were almost closed when I heard a noise Slowly getting louder; what a frightening voice? It's knocking on my door like there's something wrong Breathing stopped; heartbeats like never before I paused in indecision while holding the door knob From the window the wind blows; atmosphere's intense As I opened the door, I almost killed a man Uncle Mel is on the house; a blushed of surprise He asked if Dad's around and seemed a need inside I wondered that he looked liked exhausted and too tired Yet, I answered him in an awkward style Then he left me with a feeling of strange and fright I went back on my bed feeling weird and crazy I have just made a ghost; an illusion of fear I let it out of me since nightmares are greedy The more we think of terror, the more it eats our dream The morning waved hello; everything's fine I got off my bed to start the day right Then I saw my Mom packing and dealing with some stuffs She's crying and leaving to town Questions I'd asked to know what's going on At the tip of her tongue but to utter's arduos I calmed her down and her story has begun About an innocent man who died the night I got wild It was an evening in July, nine on a dot When the man got stabbed stopping a fight Calling my dad's name; looking for help Dead on the spot and found no aid Goosebumps all over when I heard the news It's Uncle Mel who passed away and visited my room Never knew all the reasons behind the apparition One thing's for sure, He's soul still calls #Everything Holloween Created: October 18, 2013

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Date: 11/11/2013 6:37:00 PM
A very interesting story! I enjoyed it very much! Great work, Arden! Congratulations on your win!...This poem reminded me of two of mine, "Ghost" and "You Know Something Is There"...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. I appreciate it very much!
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Arden Gopela
Date: 11/13/2013 1:56:00 PM
Wow! Your words are delight to my heart! Thanks, Kelly!Your welcome! Be safe! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
Date: 11/11/2013 12:20:00 AM
Congrats on the win. Glad you could turn the experience into a poetic story :)
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Date: 11/11/2013 7:54:00 AM
Thank you, Karen! That's encouraging! That's an experience of a lifetime. Worth-recorded! Bless you my friend! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
Date: 11/10/2013 5:32:00 PM
enjoyed this write from your pen, whether based on truth or fiction you penned the story well...congrats on your win :)
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Arden Gopela
Date: 11/11/2013 7:52:00 AM
Thanks, Sandra! Appreciate that! This was based on my personal experience. Nostalgic and worth-writing for me. Thanks for taking time reading my long entry. Take care my friend. Love,love,love! :-) - Den
Date: 11/10/2013 12:50:00 AM
Congrats on the win, Arden
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Arden Gopela
Date: 11/10/2013 4:06:00 AM
Thanks, Dr. Mehta! All the best my friend! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
Date: 11/9/2013 6:39:00 PM
wow, is this true?? An amazing and sad story. Congrats for the win with this spooky tale.
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Arden Gopela
Date: 11/10/2013 4:10:00 AM
Yes, Andrea! This is so true! This was my experience back in my teenage years. Had a lot of stories like this one in the past! Sixth-sense was active back then. Bless you my friend! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
Date: 11/9/2013 5:14:00 PM
Arden, Congratulations on your awesome Halloween win. Love ~ SKAT~
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Arden Gopela
Date: 11/10/2013 4:13:00 AM
Wow! Thanks a lot SKAT for choosing this piece as one of your winners! Happy that you liked it! More power to you and to your future contests. Love,love,love! :-) - Den
Date: 10/20/2013 3:21:00 AM
Spooky but very touching.
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Arden Gopela
Date: 10/20/2013 4:38:00 AM
Can't forget the feeling whenever the memory injects! Sixth sense no more! Happy Holloween, Jake! Love,love,love! :-)
Date: 10/18/2013 1:42:00 PM
This is my Holloween treat for you guys and for all the soupers. It's a true story that I had experienced in the past! Can't forget the spooky feeling! Hope you like it! Love, love, love! :-)
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