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Traditional Tanka Contest sponsored by Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

Tangerine sunset sinks below the horizon. Willow tree whispers welcoming blue velvet sky, cloaking us with diamond light. 05~28~16

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Paul Callus

Date: 8/6/2016 8:45:00 AM

This must be the third time that I have stopped by to read this poem, Jan....still as beautiful as before:) Congrats on this worthy win. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 9/15/2016 9:29:00 AM

many thanks Paul sorry I missed replying to the comment before:-( hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/5/2016 12:41:00 AM

This is indeed beautiful:) Congratulations on your win, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2016 4:25:00 AM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/4/2016 10:37:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your nice placement in the contest. Lovely imagery in your nature Tanka. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2016 4:36:00 AM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/4/2016 10:17:00 PM

Hi Jan. It's good to see you on the winners list. You painted a lovely picture with words. Congratulations on your win:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2016 4:37:00 AM

Thanks Alexis-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Arnone

Date: 8/4/2016 7:19:00 PM

I could hear those diamond/crystal/starry chimes! Congrats, Jan. :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/5/2016 4:37:00 AM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 8/4/2016 6:43:00 PM

A lovely tanka Jan...Congrats on your win

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2016 6:48:00 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/4/2016 5:54:00 PM

Good to see this one on the winners list Jan...congrats

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2016 6:48:00 PM

It was a lovely surprise Tim:-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 8/4/2016 5:45:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jan :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2016 6:48:00 PM

Many thanks Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/4/2016 5:32:00 PM

So beautiful, Jan. I see you used an oldie also~~ Congrats again, my friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2016 5:35:00 PM

I'm smiling so much Andrea am delighted to place in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 8/4/2016 4:40:00 PM

Jan, so beautiful...congrats on your placement! :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/4/2016 5:34:00 PM

Thanks LuLoo I didn't know the contest had been judged:-):-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/24/2016 3:12:00 PM

I knew that Charlotte would love the imagery in this tanka, Jan! Indeed a worthy win! Congratulations...hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/24/2016 3:20:00 PM

Thanks Paul - a win with Charlotte means so much to me I respect her so much as a sponsor:-) hugs Jan xx

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 6/21/2016 9:45:00 PM

You've capture the image in well under 1000 words. Congrats on your win.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/22/2016 5:45:00 PM

Thanks Dave i am so delighted to place in the contest as Charlotte is a sponsor I so admire:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 6/19/2016 12:58:00 PM

Nicely written Jan ,congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/19/2016 1:50:00 PM

Many thanks Robert:-) hugs jan xx

Meenakshi Raina

Date: 6/18/2016 7:39:00 PM

Congratulations Jan...very beautiful Tanka..

Jan Allison
Date: 6/19/2016 7:07:00 AM

Thanks Meenakshi:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/18/2016 7:26:00 PM

WAy to go, jan. Bummer for me cat one though. hahaha.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/19/2016 7:08:00 AM

Thanks Andrea - looks like you and me both fell foul with submitting pussy poems in contests lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/18/2016 6:52:00 PM

Very beautiful tanka poem, Jan! Congrats on your win:)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/19/2016 7:08:00 AM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 6/18/2016 4:23:00 PM

jan, in many ways the numerical placement of this tanka belies how lovely it really is (there was very little to choose between the winners); it was certainly the most beautiful entry i received, i enjoyed the imagery and the alliteration, and you know your strength lies in these short forms - congrats on your win in my contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/18/2016 4:27:00 PM

Thank you so much for your lovely comment and boosting my confidence with my writing Charlotte - a win with you really is special:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/18/2016 3:42:00 PM

Very lovely, Jan. Congratulations on your fine win in this Traditional Tanka Premiere Contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 6/18/2016 4:08:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I respect Charlotte so much as a sponsor and a win with her really is special to me:-) hugs jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/1/2016 12:00:00 PM

Really beautiful poem with beautiful picture that captivates eyes boosts up the sense to feel the diamond light in tangerine sunset. Beautiful 7 my lovely friend. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 6/1/2016 12:05:00 PM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Joe Dimino

Date: 6/1/2016 4:10:00 AM

Very beautiful!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/1/2016 4:27:00 AM

Thanks Joe I have written few poems of this form I hope Charlotte likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Funom Makama

Date: 5/30/2016 11:23:00 AM

Great write, beautiful lines. A well deserved 7

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 12:53:00 PM

Thanks Funom:-) hugs Jan xx

Daver Austin

Date: 5/30/2016 10:17:00 AM

Very colorful this evening delight. Love, daver

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 12:53:00 PM

Thanks so much Daver it is not a form I am that familiar with I do hope Charlotte approves:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/28/2016 11:22:00 PM

What can one say? Beautiful simply beautiful!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2016 2:20:00 AM

Aww you are too kind Arthur:-) hugs Jan xx

Francis J Grasso

Date: 5/28/2016 7:32:00 PM

Beautiful Jan. ...Fran

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2016 2:20:00 AM

Thanks so much Fran:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/28/2016 6:14:00 PM

lovely imagery Jan....like the tangerine sunset

Jan Allison
Date: 5/28/2016 6:16:00 PM

I've done several poems using this sort of imagery Tim I love the idea of a tangerine sunset it seems so apt when I see the sky some evenings:-) I also love it when the sky is delicate shades of lilac and pink too - we are having some stunning sunsets at the moment:-) hugs Jan