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Twilight

"Twillight"* A 'Swan' in town can be found on school ground --that's me bored and off qi rain daunts me --'till I see him there... can't help but stare his eyes glare --so aware...I thirst! ©deborah burch 4/10/2012 _________________________________________ *inspired by the book/movie: "Twilight" Form: than-bauk

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Date: 4/26/2012 3:32:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 4/19/2012 4:43:00 PM
Got a chuckle...Great winning work..Congrats..Sara
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Date: 4/19/2012 5:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Nette's "Than-Bauk" contest Deborah. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/18/2012 12:57:00 PM
Nicely done...........George
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Date: 4/18/2012 11:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your inspiration. And win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/18/2012 5:58:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Deb xx
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Date: 4/11/2012 9:49:00 AM
Sweet write Deborah , Best wishes ,Declan xxx
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Deborah Burch
Date: 4/11/2012 10:01:00 AM
Thank you so much Dec...it's good to see you...BIG HUGGS (((((O))))),love deb
Date: 4/11/2012 2:51:00 AM
hi susan... the first 3 lines are okay.. treed on 4th line doesn;t seem to rhyme with "machine", and so on... you got 6-9 lines right.. did i make sense or are you more confused??.. let me know!..:) huggs!
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Deborah Burch
Date: 4/11/2012 2:57:00 AM
lol...no nette, I understand now...and I can't blame this on my blonde hair either :O!! Let me see what I can do... thank you so much...lol..love, deb
Date: 4/11/2012 2:11:00 AM
thanks for joining, deborah.. so nice!.. kindly check rhyme pattern and syl count... i have placed an example on the contest page.. if you need to revise, just edit and update your poem... will do another blog on this later!:) huggs!
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Date: 4/11/2012 12:36:00 AM
Great write.
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Deborah Burch
Date: 4/11/2012 12:54:00 AM
Thanx Elliot, so much...big huggs,love deb

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