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Tunnel Vision

As I watched the sweat roll down past my chin and down my sides I stayed determined to keep up my stamina for this one track ride I pumped the handcar trolley through the tunnels twists and turns keeping my eyes focused although at times they stung and burned As I pumped I noticed my hair go from brown to gray but that didn't deter me going down the tunnel track each day Elation and adrenaline I felt approaching the light at the very end and jumping off the handcar trolley I retired round the bend 4-26-18

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J.W. Earnings

Date: 5/28/2018 9:05:00 AM

Awesome poem...what an adventure!! (:

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 5/28/2018 6:16:00 PM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit JW; glad you like the adventure!~Che :)

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/2/2018 11:57:00 PM

Excellent. Well penned. All the best.

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 5/3/2018 8:36:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Ravi; glad you liked it!~Che :)

Charles Messina

Date: 4/30/2018 9:54:00 PM

As we age in life, it seems like every turn and twist through the tunnel we get another grey hair. Enjoyed the ride on the handcar trolley, especially because I've never been on one.(lol) Good luck in the contest Che! ...All the best...Charlie

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 5/1/2018 8:42:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Charlie; glad you enjoyed the ride which I've never been on either...just in my imagination~Che :)

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/29/2018 8:04:00 AM

Enjoyed reading this one. It has good flow and rhythm. We do put a lot into life and it does wear us down. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 4/30/2018 8:20:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Sara; glad you enjoyed it and your very welcome!~Che :)

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 4/29/2018 6:09:00 AM

This is an original, I love it Cheryl. Love the part where the hair changes color, gradually it seems in the stark reality of life and death. Thanks for the sharing gl in the contest

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 4/30/2018 8:20:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Pixie Dust; glad you enjoyed it!~Che :)

John Gondolf

Date: 4/27/2018 11:39:00 AM

Nicely written, Cheryl, I am starting to think about taking the leap myself. John

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 4/28/2018 7:41:00 PM

I am going to try to hang in there till I turn 66 1/2 which is 6 years from now (aaargh!) Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit John and good luck if you take the leap!~Che :)

Susan Gentry

Date: 4/26/2018 10:37:00 PM

I so like this! Excellent for the contest. Good luck.

Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 4/27/2018 8:23:00 AM

Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Susan; really appreciate it!~Che :)